Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence with one or two supporting details. Avoid fillers (‘uh’, ‘gonna’) and correct subject-verb agreement and word choice (e.g., 'a postgraduate student', 'master's degree in translation').

例: I am currently a postgraduate student studying translation. After I graduate, I plan to complete a master's degree in translation and then pursue a teaching career.

提案: Start with a direct statement and then add one or two specific details. Use correct prepositions and avoid repetition. Give accurate size descriptions (e.g., 'thousands of acres' or 'a large campus').

例: I study at Hubei University in Wuhan. The campus is large and pleasant, covering several thousand acres, and it is located in a busy district of the city.

提案: Give a clear affirmative topic sentence followed by two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'also'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'teachers who teach us', 'we can concentrate'). Reduce hesitations.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the campus has a large library where students can borrow books and study quietly. Also, we have many supportive teachers who explain topics clearly.

提案: Answer directly then give one specific suggestion using clear language. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use a linking phrase for contrast ('however') and a simple clear request ('plant more trees').

例: Overall, I am happy with the university; however, I would like the campus environment improved by planting more trees to create more shade and green spaces.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your main plan, then add specific, logical steps. Avoid unclear phrases ('else band 7')—state 'IELTS band 7' if that is meant. Use correct verb forms ('master's degree').

例: My main plan is to complete a master's degree in translation. After that, I hope to achieve an IELTS band 7 and then work as a teacher at a middle school.

× Uh, right now I'm a postgraduate students and uh, I'm gonna go to the postgraduate school for my uh, study and after graduation I, I'm gonna be AI gonna get my uh, master degree on translation.

✓ Uh, right now I'm a postgraduate student, and I'm going to the postgraduate school to study, and after graduation I'm going to get my master's degree in translation.

The noun 'students' should be singular 'student' to match the singular subject 'I' (singular and plural issue). Use 'going to' instead of 'gonna' for formality and clarity. 'Master degree' requires the possessive form 'master's degree' and the preposition 'in' is correct for the field of study. Also remove repeated words and extraneous fillers to make the sentence grammatical and fluent.

× So I'm a student.

✓ So I am a student.

Contraction 'I'm' is acceptable, but given surrounding formal corrections keep 'I am' for clarity. This item is minor; no participle issue actually; corrected to maintain formality and consistency.

× Well, I study in the Hubei University which located in the Wuhan Wuhan city.

✓ Well, I study at Hubei University, which is located in Wuhan city.

Use preposition 'at' with institutions like universities, not 'in'. Include the verb 'is' for the relative clause ('which is located'). Avoid repeating 'Wuhan'. This fixes the incorrect preposition and missing verb.

× Wu Tang district is a huge city and the campus is very nice.

✓ Wuchang District is part of Wuhan and the campus is very nice.

'Wu Tang district is a huge city' is incorrect: a district is not a city. Clarify relationship: use correct district name 'Wuchang' if intended, and state it's part of Wuhan. This fixes the factual and structure error.

× It covers about thousands acres, is a huge university.

✓ It covers about a thousand acres; it is a large university.

'Thousands acres' is ungrammatical; use 'a thousand acres' or 'thousands of acres'. Also add 'it' for second clause and prefer 'large' instead of 'huge' for naturalness. This corrects number expression and sentence structure.

× Uh, yes, I think so. Uh, cause in our campus there is a, there is a big library for us to borrow the books, uh, and we can pay our attention in, in the library to study, uh, to get focused, I think.

✓ Yes, I think so. On our campus there is a large library where we can borrow books, and we can concentrate and study there.

Use 'on our campus' rather than 'in our campus' (preposition correction), 'a big library' -> 'a large library' for style, and omit 'the' before 'books' when speaking generally. 'Pay our attention' is incorrect; use 'concentrate' or 'focus'. This addresses preposition, article, and word choice issues (items 11 and 22 and 13).

× And uh, we have lots of very nice teacher to taught us.

✓ And we have many very good teachers who teach us.

'Lots of' is informal; 'many' fits better. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'we have' (singular/plural mismatch). Use present simple 'teach' instead of 'taught' because their teaching is ongoing. Also use relative pronoun 'who'. This fixes plural, tense, and word choice errors (items 1,5,13).

× Oh, well, I think it's perfect right now. But I do wish our university to get some changes in the, in the, I mean the environment to plan to plan more trees in the in the campus.

✓ Oh, well, I think it's fine right now, but I do wish our university would make some changes to the environment, for example by planting more trees on campus.

'I wish our university to get some changes' is ungrammatical; use 'wish ... would' or 'would make changes'. Repeated phrases removed. Use 'planting' (gerund) after 'by' for the action. Use 'on campus' instead of 'in the campus'. This corrects pronoun construction and verb pattern (items 12 and 8).

× Well about my plan in the study I think is to get my master degree in translation and I do wish to pursue my uh goal to get the else uh band 7 I think and uh, then go to a middle school to be a teacher.

✓ Well, regarding my study plans, I plan to get my master's degree in translation. I also hope to achieve a Band 7 in IELTS, and then become a middle school teacher.

Restructure for clarity and correct tense: 'I plan' (present simple for future plan). Use 'master's degree' and 'in translation'. 'Pursue my goal to get the else band 7' is unclear—likely 'Band 7 in IELTS'; specify that. 'Go to a middle school to be a teacher' -> 'become a middle school teacher'. This corrects tense, article, and word choice errors (items 6,22,13).