Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法和发音问题影响清晰度；回答有重复（"furniture furniture"）且信息组织不够紧凑。建议使用一句主题句直接回答，然后用1–2个带连接词的补充细节，避免重复，并注意常用搭配（例如 "soft furnishings"、"interior spaces"）。

例: I’m currently a university student studying environmental design, specialising in soft furnishings. In my course we design furniture, textiles and decorative items to improve interior spaces, which helps me learn both aesthetic and practical aspects.

提案: 回答总体明确但存在拼写与词汇搭配错误（如地名拼写、"well established"可连写为 "well-established"，"intergenering"不正确）。建议先给出学校名称然后用一两句话说明学校特点，注意使用准确词汇并用连词衔接句子。

例: I study at Shenzhen University of Science and Technology. It’s a well-established public university in my province, and it’s particularly known for its strong design and interdisciplinary programmes.

提案: 表达有语法和词汇错误（例如 "first read educational resources"、"environmental is very comforting"），句子衔接不够自然。建议用一两句简洁说明理由，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'and' 并用更自然的词汇（例如 'access to high-quality resources'、'pleasant environment'）。

例: Yes, definitely. The university offers access to high-quality learning resources, and the teachers are professional and supportive, which makes learning easier. Moreover, the campus has a pleasant environment, so I can concentrate better.

提案: 内容清楚且有具体细节，但句子稍显冗长且有语法瑕疵（例如 'we like personal privacy' 可改为 'we value privacy'，'sound blocking' 更自然为 'soundproofing'）。建议先给出总体意见，再用两点分开说明，并使用连接词 'first'、'second'。

例: Yes. First, the dormitories are quite cramped for six people, and we would really value more privacy. Second, they lack good soundproofing, so it’s often noisy and hard to study.

提案: 表达不清且有多次重复（"depend"、"pursue pursue"、"gratitude gratitude"），动词搭配错误（应为 'deepen my knowledge'、'pursue a postgraduate degree'）。建议用一到两句清楚表述未来计划，避免重复并使用正确短语。

例: I’d like to deepen my knowledge and shift my focus from environmental design to fashion design. If possible, I hope to continue my studies and pursue a postgraduate degree in fashion design.

× At present I am a university student.

✓ At present, I am a university student.

句子缺少逗号用于分隔时间状语“At present”和主句，属于标点与句子结构处理，不改变时态。建议在“At present”后加逗号以提高可读性。

× I study environmental design with a focus on soft furnishing.

✓ I study environmental design with a focus on soft furnishings.

名词“furnishing”在此处指一类物品应使用复数形式“furnishings”。根据主谓与名词单复数搭配规则，使用复数更自然。建议把单数改为复数以匹配语境。

× We work on furniture furniture textiles and ornaments to improve indoors.

✓ We work on furniture, textiles and ornaments to improve indoor spaces.

原句重复“furniture”且短语“to improve indoors”结构不自然。需删除重复并调整为“indoor spaces”来表达“改善室内环境”。这是句子结构和词序问题，应重组短语以保持意义明确。

× I study at Shenzhi University of Science and Technology.

✓ I study at Shenzhen University of Science and Technology.

原句中“Shenzhi”拼写错误，属专有名词拼写问题而非语法类型列表中的项，但涉及定冠词使用时校正无须加冠词。此处更正拼写以符合校名。

× It's a well established public university in Xiang, well known for its design and intergenering programs.

✓ It's a well-established public university in Xiang, well known for its design and interdisciplinary programs.

“well established”应连字符连接为“well-established”；“intergenering”不是正确单词，推测为“interdisciplinary”。句子结构需修正词形和拼写以表达“跨学科项目”。

× We can have access to first read educational resources and the teachers are professional and responsible.

✓ We can have access to first-rate educational resources, and the teachers are professional and responsible.

“first read”是拼写/用词错误，应为“first-rate”表示“优质的”。同时两个并列分句之间加逗号更自然。此为词汇选择和标点改进。

× Besides the school, environmental is very comforting, which can boost our study efficiency.

✓ Besides the school, the environment is very comfortable, which can boost our study efficiency.

“environmental”是形容词，需名词“environment”；“comforting”侧重使人感到安慰，表达环境宜人用“comfortable”。因此把形容词改为名词并使用正确形容词形式。

× Yes, of course as for me the dormitory is a place where I hope to be upgraded because the space is limited for six people to live in and we like personal privacy.

✓ Yes, of course. For me, the dormitory is a place I hope will be improved because the space for six people is limited and we value personal privacy.

原句冗长且“hope to be upgraded”被动且不自然，应改为主动结构“hope will be improved”。调整词序以提高可读性并修正“we like personal privacy”为更地道的“we value personal privacy”。属于句子结构和被动语态不当问题。

× Secondly, it's noisy due to the poor sound blocking.

✓ Secondly, it's noisy due to poor sound insulation.

“sound blocking”用法不自然，通常说“sound insulation”或“soundproofing”。这是介词短语/名词搭配选择问题，建议使用更地道的固定搭配。

× I want to depend my knowledge and shift my design to fashion design.

✓ I want to deepen my knowledge and shift my design focus to fashion design.

“depend my knowledge”用法错误，应为“deepen my knowledge”表示深化知识；同时补充“focus”使短语“shift my design focus to...”更完整。原句属于动词搭配错误，应改为正确的动词短语。

× If I had the chance I would love to further my study and pursue pursue a post gratitude gratitude degree.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to further my studies and pursue a postgraduate degree.

句中重复单词“pursue pursue”和“gratitude gratitude”为明显笔误，应修正为“postgraduate degree”。此外“study”通常用复数“studies”或用“further my education”。加逗号在条件句从句后更自然。属于句子结构和词汇错误。