Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に直接答えられている点は良いですが、発音ミスや文法の誤り（“I'm a studying in you Musashi University”）が多く、自然さに欠けます。改善点：正しい文型（be動詞 + 動名詞/現在分詞は不要）を使うこと、大学名は明確に発音すること。練習方法の具体例：大学名を短く区切ってゆっくり発音し、“I’m a student at Musashi University.”の文を繰り返す。

例: I’m a student at Musashi University.

提案: 文が意味不明で情報が混乱しています。場所を伝えるにはシンプルで正確な語順（主語＋動詞＋場所）を使い、不要な単語や繰り返しを避けてください。具体的練習：『I study at Musashi University in Tokyo Prefecture.』を何度か声に出して、“in Tokyo”や“at Musashi University”の前置詞に注意する。

例: I study at Musashi University, which is located in Tokyo Prefecture.

提案: 意見はあるがまとまりがなく、文法・語順・語彙選択が不適切です。まず主旨のトピック文（Yes, it's a good place to study.）を示し、続けて具体的理由を1〜2つ述べましょう。接続詞（because, for example）を使って文をつなげる練習をしてください。

例: Yes, it’s a good place to study because the teachers are very knowledgeable and the courses are practical, which helps us in real-world situations.

提案: 肯定／否定は伝わるが、文法（be belongingは不自然）、繰り返しや冗長さが多いです。改善：自然な表現（I’m enrolled in the Global Data Science course.）を使い、理由を短く具体的に述べること。練習方法：1文で結論、2文目で理由の順に組み立てる練習を繰り返す。

例: I wouldn’t want to change universities because I’m enrolled in the Global Data Science course, and it offers the specialized classes I need.

提案: 将来計画は示されていますが、文構造の混乱と繰り返しが目立ちます。‘want to get a job related to marketing’のように前置詞と形容詞形を正しく使う練習、理由を短く明確に述べる練習が必要です。具体的には、理由を一つに絞ってbecause節で繋げる練習をしてください。

例: In the future, I want to get a job in marketing because my classes teach us how to analyze society and consumer behavior.

× I'm a studying in you Musashi University.

✓ I'm a student studying at Musashi University.

The original sentence uses incorrect articles and prepositions and has extra words. Use 'a student' to state status, 'studying' as the present participle, and the correct preposition for institutions is 'at'. Remove the extra word 'you'. Suggestion: Say 'I'm a student studying at Musashi University.'

× I miss Tully in Massage University where where there is a Tokyo prefecture.

✓ I study at Musashi University, which is in Tokyo Prefecture.

The original sentence has many incorrect words and repetition. Use 'study at' for attending a university, and use a relative clause 'which is in Tokyo Prefecture' to indicate location. Remove repeated words and wrong proper nouns. Suggestion: 'I study at Musashi University, which is in Tokyo Prefecture.'

× Teacher is smart and university major is major is good for example get injured supporting is is have helpful for for us.

✓ The teachers are smart and the university's majors are good; for example, the support we receive is helpful for us.

The sentence has singular/plural and agreement problems and repetition. Use plural 'teachers' if referring to multiple, add articles 'the', and fix noun forms: 'majors' and 'support'. Remove duplicated words. Structure as two clauses for clarity. Suggestion: 'The teachers are smart and the university's majors are good; for example, the support we receive is helpful for us.'

× Well I don't really want to change my university because I am belonging to global data science Data science course.

✓ Well, I don't really want to change my university because I belong to the Global Data Science course.

Use 'belong to' without progressive 'am belonging to'. Capitalize the course name appropriately and use the definite article 'the' for a specific course. Remove duplicate words. Suggestion: 'I belong to the Global Data Science course.'

× In this course I think I I can take take the grade class.

✓ In this course, I think I can take advanced classes to improve my grades.

The original has repetition and unclear phrase 'grade class'. Use 'can take' plus a noun phrase like 'advanced classes' or 'grade-improving classes'. Remove duplicates and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: 'I can take advanced classes to improve my grades.'

× Well, in the future, I'm I want to get a job relate to marketing because in my class, teachers teacher, tea teacher teach teach us the way to analyze society.

✓ Well, in the future, I want to get a job related to marketing because in my classes, teachers teach us how to analyze society.

Remove the accidental 'I'm' and repeated words. Use 'related to marketing' (adjective form) and plural 'classes' if multiple. Use present simple 'teach' for habitual actions and 'how to analyze' for correct phrasing. Remove duplicate words and typos. Suggestion: 'I want to get a job related to marketing because in my classes, teachers teach us how to analyze society.'