Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency: correct subject-verb errors, remove repetition, use clearer role description and link ideas with simple connectors. Keep answer concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

例: I am working now at a central hospital in Taichung. I work in the surgical department, where I prepare patients for operations and assist with preoperative care. Because of this role, I meet many different people every day.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer sentence structure: state location, course, and graduation year in correct past tense and avoid vague phrases. Add a concise follow-up about current situation.

例: I studied in Taichung, in central Taiwan, and graduated in 2014 with a degree in nursing. After graduation I started working at a central hospital, and I have continued there since then.

提案: Make comparisons clearer and fix grammar: use present tense for general facts, link points with connectors, and be specific (how transport is convenient).

例: Yes, Taichung is a good city for students. The weather is generally pleasant, and public transport is convenient — there are frequent buses and easy trains that make it simple to travel around the city and to nearby areas.

提案: Be concise and specific: state the change, give a reason, and suggest a clear example. Avoid filler words and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rental bikes' and 'short trips').

例: Yes. I think the city could provide more options for short trips, such as expanding rental bike stations and shuttle services near universities, because many students rely on quick, affordable transport between campus and housing.

提案: Polish grammar and add a brief reason with a linking phrase: use conditional correctly and mention what aspects of the language or culture attract you. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: At the moment I don't have concrete study plans, but if I had more time I would like to study Spanish. I find the language fascinating and I want to learn about Spanish-speaking cultures, especially their literature and traditions.

× I'm am working now.

✓ I'm working now.

The sentence contains an extra auxiliary 'am' resulting in duplication of the verb 'to be'. Use either 'I am working' or the contracted form 'I'm working'. Remove the extra 'am' to form a grammatically correct present continuous sentence.

× I currently work in central a central hospital.

✓ I currently work in a central hospital.

The original sentence misorders the article 'a' and the adjective 'central'. The correct order is article + adjective + noun: 'a central hospital'. Also remove the duplicated word 'central'.

× I service surgical department I therefore I accept different types of people for surgical prepare.

✓ I work in the surgical department; therefore, I prepare different types of people for surgery.

Multiple issues: 'service' is the wrong verb here (use 'work in' or 'serve'), missing article before 'surgical department', run-on sentence and incorrect phrase 'surgical prepare'. Rephrase to clarify meaning: use a semicolon or conjunction, add 'the' before 'surgical department', and use 'prepare different types of people for surgery'.

× I studied in middle of Taiwan, Taejong City.

✓ I studied in the middle of Taiwan, in Taichung City.

The preposition 'in' is needed before 'the middle' and before the city name. Also correct city name spelling to 'Taichung'. Use 'the middle of Taiwan' to indicate region.

× I had graduated in 2014.

✓ I graduated in 2014.

The past perfect 'had graduated' is unnecessary when stating a simple past event with a clear time marker. Use the simple past 'graduated' for completed actions at a specific time in the past.

× I studied my major study was nursing department.

✓ I majored in nursing.

The original is redundant and ungrammatical. Use the verb 'major' with 'in' to indicate field of study: 'I majored in nursing.' This is concise and correct.

× After I graduated, I keep working in the century hospital for.

✓ After I graduated, I have continued working at the central hospital.

'Keep working' is unnatural for a past-to-present continuation; use present perfect 'have continued'. Also correct article and name: likely 'central hospital' not 'century hospital', and use preposition 'at' for workplaces. Remove trailing 'for'.

× Yes, Taichung is a good city for students studying.

✓ Yes, Taichung is a good city for students.

The phrase 'students studying' is redundant; 'students' suffices. No article change needed; concise noun phrase is preferred.

× For example, the weather was so comfortable while the public transportation is convenient and easy access to other place.

✓ For example, the weather is comfortable, public transportation is convenient, and it is easy to access other places.

Mixed tenses ('was' and 'is') create inconsistency; use present tense for general truths. 'While' is better replaced by a comma and conjunction. 'Easy access to other place' is incorrect: use 'it is easy to access other places' or 'easy access to other places' and pluralize 'places'.

× To be honest, I think the government can build more public transportation such as uh, rental bike for Showton for shorter traveling because they are so many students around the city of Taichung, so I think it can improve.

✓ To be honest, I think the government could build more public transport options, such as rental bikes for short trips, because there are so many students in Taichung; this would be an improvement.

Use of modal 'can' is acceptable but 'could' is more polite for suggestions. 'Public transportation' -> 'public transport options' fits context. Correct noun forms: 'rental bikes' plural, 'short trips' instead of 'shorter traveling'. 'There are so many' fixes subject-verb order. Replace 'it can improve' with 'this would be an improvement' for clarity.

× Well, from now I don't have any study plan in the future.

✓ At the moment, I don't have any study plans for the future.

'From now' is awkward; 'at the moment' or 'currently' is better. Use plural 'plans' usually and 'for the future' makes phrase clearer. Maintain present simple to describe current state.

× However, if I have more time, I would want to study Spanish because that language is very interesting for me.

✓ However, if I had more time, I would like to study Spanish because the language interests me.

This is a second conditional: use past tense 'had' in the if-clause and conditional 'would like' in the result. 'That language is very interesting for me' is awkward; use 'the language interests me'.

× I can learn a lot from this language and their culture.

✓ I can learn a lot from this language and its culture.

Pronoun 'their' is plural and does not agree with singular noun 'language'. Use the singular possessive pronoun 'its' to refer to 'this language'.