Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中注意语法和简洁性，避免重复（例如“high school”重复）、动词时态和主谓一致错误。尽量开门见山作主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，用连接词使条理更清楚。如将长句拆成两句并修正动词形式。

例: I'm currently a final-year high school student. I'm preparing for university applications by studying hard and entering several competitions to strengthen my profile.

提案: 回答结构较好但可更自然简洁。避免冗长的开头（例如“I've been studying in a high school named...”可以更直接），并用恰当的连接词使细节更具体（如举例说明哪些设施如何帮助学习）。

例: I study at Washington High School in Taichung. It has friendly teachers and excellent facilities, such as a well-stocked library and modern science labs, which help me with research and practical experiments.

提案: 注意衔接词使用和语法（例如‘yet’用法不当，动词形式错误如‘cheers’应为‘cheered’）。起始先给主题句，再用一个具体例子支持观点，保持句子简短清晰。

例: Yes, it's a great place to study because the teachers are very supportive. For example, after I lost a speech competition, my teachers encouraged me and helped rebuild my confidence.

提案: 注意语法和单词选择（例如用数字“1”不合适，主谓一致如“has hygiene problems”），避免重复表达‘really’。给出具体改进建议，并解释原因和预期效果。

例: Yes. I would like the school to renovate the cafeteria because the current one is old and has hygiene issues. Updating it would allow healthier and more affordable meal options for students.

提案: 回答含混且有语法和表达错误（如‘seems like a competitive 1:00’和不定冠词误用）。应先给清晰的主题句，然后用一两点具体计划（例如目标专业、国家、准备方式），并用连接词组织信息。

例: I plan to continue studying hard and joining more competitions to strengthen my university application. I also hope to study abroad, possibly in the US, and I'm preparing by improving my English and researching suitable universities.

× Well, I'm a currently a high school student in my final year of high school and so now on I have been working hard and participate in a lot of competitions in order to make myself more competitive so I can apply to an ideal university in the future.

✓ Well, I'm currently a high school student in my final year, and recently I have been working hard and participating in a lot of competitions in order to make myself more competitive so I can apply to an ideal university in the future.

错误类型：现在时态与动词形式混用，以及冗余词语。 解释与建议：句中“I'm a currently a high school student”有双重冠词/位置错误，应为“I'm currently a high school student”。“so now on”用法不自然，改为“recently”或“now”更合适。后半句“have been working hard and participate”时态不一致，应把两者并列为现在完成进行/完成式的一部分，改为“have been working hard and participating”。建议：保持时态一致，去掉多余冠词，使用自然时间词。 Grammar Problem Type ID:6

× Well, I've been studying in a high school named Washington High School located in Taichung and I believe that it's a great place to study because the teachers are friendly and there's a lot of great facilities like libraries and some well equipped science labs.

✓ Well, I've been studying at a high school called Washington High School located in Taichung, and I believe that it's a great place to study because the teachers are friendly and there are a lot of great facilities like libraries and some well-equipped science labs.

错误类型：介词用法与主谓一致问题。 解释与建议：英语中通常说“study at a school”而不是“study in a school”，所以将“in”改为“at”。另外，“there's a lot of great facilities”是主谓不一致（there is 用于单数），应改为“there are a lot of great facilities”。“well equipped”缺连字符，改为“well-equipped”。建议：注意介词搭配并使主谓在人称数上一致，形容词短语按需加连字符。 Grammar Problem Type ID:11

× Yet it is beside its great facilities, the teachers are friendly and supportive.

✓ Besides its great facilities, the teachers are friendly and supportive.

错误类型：连词/句子结构错误。 解释与建议：“Yet it is beside its great facilities”结构混乱且用词不当，应使用“Besides”表示“除了……之外”。去掉多余的“it is”及“beside”误用。建议：用“Besides its great facilities,”引出补充信息，保证句子通顺。 Grammar Problem Type ID:27

× To give you an idea, I have once participated in a speech competition and I lost.

✓ To give you an idea, I once participated in a speech competition and I lost.

错误类型：过去时态使用不当。 解释与建议：句中使用“have once participated”与随后“I lost”时态不一致。既然事件发生在过去并已结束，应把前者改为一般过去时“once participated”。建议：同一叙述中保持时态一致，若强调过去经历可用“once participated”。 Grammar Problem Type ID:5

× I was really upset, but my teachers just cheers me up and gives me confidence, so I think it's a great place to study.

✓ I was really upset, but my teachers just cheered me up and gave me confidence, so I think it's a great place to study.

错误类型：动词形式与主语时态不一致（主谓一致/时态）。 解释与建议：前句为过去时“I was really upset”，后面描述老师的行为也应使用过去时，且主语“my teachers”（复数）需要复数动词形式。把“cheers”改为“cheered”，“gives”改为“gave”。建议：注意复数主语用复数动词，并与叙述时态保持一致。 Grammar Problem Type ID:4

× Well to be honest I really want my school to have a new cafeteria because the current 1 is a bit old and have hygiene problems so I really want my school to fix that problem and add more healthier options and affordable ones.

✓ Well, to be honest, I really want my school to have a new cafeteria because the current one is a bit old and has hygiene problems, so I really want my school to fix that problem and add healthier and more affordable options.

错误类型：冠词/数与动词一致及形容词比较顺序。 解释与建议：用数字“1”不合适，应写“one”或“the current one”。“have hygiene problems”应与单数主语“the current one”搭配，改为“has hygiene problems”。“add more healthier options”中“more healthier”重复比较词，应改为“healthier”或“more healthy”，更自然为“healthier and more affordable options”。建议：注意代词代替前文名词、动词与主语的一致性，以及形容词比较级的正确使用。 Grammar Problem Type ID:22

× Well, I plan to just keep studying harder and participate in more competition to make myself seems like a competitive 1:00 so that I can apply to and better university in the future and also I am planning to study abroad.

✓ Well, I plan to keep studying harder and participating in more competitions to make myself seem more competitive so that I can apply to a better university in the future, and I am also planning to study abroad.

错误类型：动词后接-ing形式、现在时态、单复数与比较结构错误。 解释与建议：并列动词时保持形式一致，“keep studying”后应并列“participating”，所以改为“keep studying harder and participating”。“more competition”应为复数“more competitions”。“make myself seems like a competitive”中主语从句应使用不带s的原形“seem”，并且“seem more competitive”比“seem like a competitive”更自然。“apply to and better university”结构错误，改为“apply to a better university”。最后“and also I am planning”调整为更自然顺序“and I am also planning”。建议：保持动词形式一致，注意原形/ing 使用，名词单复数以及比较级搭配。 Grammar Problem Type ID:8