Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 多注意句子流利度与重复停顿，回答要更简洁并直接表达专业方向。可以把专业描述分成主句+一到两句细节，避免重复词汇和犹豫语。练习连贯衔接词（for example, especially）使表达更自然。

例: I'm a senior at Strong University, majoring in Electronic and Computer Engineering. I focus mainly on signal processing and programming languages used for embedded systems, such as C and Python.

提案: 注意语法和重复语音（如“this this”）及冗余表达。地理信息与评价可以合并成一到两句，使用连接词让句子顺畅。避免不必要的填充词（umm）。

例: I study at Strong University, which is located in the capital of Sichuan province in China. The city is well known for its vibrant culture and especially its delicious cuisine.

提案: 回答要具体并避免重复（如两次‘learning’、‘new’）。给出具体理由说明为什么适合学习，比如设施、图书馆或师资，这样内容更具体有说服力。

例: Yes, it's a great place to study. The institute has modern facilities and well-equipped laboratories, which make it easier for students to do practical experiments and projects.

提案: 回答不完整且犹豫多，语法和逻辑不清。应直接回答‘no’或提出具体改进建议，并用一两句解释原因。练习构建完整句子并减少顿挫。

例: I don't think major changes are necessary, but I would improve the teaching rooms by adding more projectors and comfortable seating to enhance learning during long lectures.

提案: 总体表达较清楚，但口头填充词（UH）和重复（I plan to have a master's degree… because… I think this way can help me）影响流利度。可更简洁地说明目标与原因，并举例说明未来方向。

例: I'm applying for a postgraduate program to pursue a master's in Communication Engineering. I want to specialize in the Internet of Things so I can work on connecting devices and developing efficient wireless systems.

× I'm currently a senior student at Strong University majoring in Electronic and Computer engineering, which is which is learning serious about signal processing and some computer processing code languages.

✓ I'm currently a senior student at Strong University majoring in Electronic and Computer Engineering, where I focus on signal processing and some computer programming languages.

句子结构混乱且重复（"which is which is"），并且短语搭配不当（"learning serious about" 不符合英语表达）。建议将定语从句改为 where 引导的状语从句，并用 focus on 或 study 来表达“专注于/学习”，将 "computer processing code languages" 改为更常见的 "computer programming languages"。这样句子更清晰、语法正确。

× I'm study at Strong University, the capital of Sichuan province in China.

✓ I study at Strong University, the capital of Sichuan province in China.

主语和谓语时态不一致："I'm study" 是错误的现在时用法，应使用简单现在时 "I study" 或现在进行时的正确形式 "I'm studying"。根据语境（常态在读）应使用 "I study" 或更自然的 "I am studying"。建议：如果想强调正在学习可用 "I'm studying"。

× Umm this this place is a is a famous city famous for its delicious food.

✓ This city is famous for its delicious food.

存在重复词（"this this", "is a is a", 双重的 "famous"）导致句子冗长且不通顺。简化并去掉多余词语可使句子明确。建议说成 "This city is famous for its delicious food." 或 "This place is famous for its delicious food."。

× Yes, certainly it's a perfect place, especially about our learning, learning building, because our institute was a new institute and the building of it is very new.

✓ Yes, certainly it's a great place, especially for our studies and the campus buildings, because our institute is new and the buildings are very modern.

形容词使用和搭配不当："a perfect place" 可接受但略夸张且与后句搭配不自然；"especially about our learning, learning building" 词序和表达错误。时态问题（"was a new institute"，若仍然是新的应用现在时）。建议用 "for our studies" 表示“对我们的学习来说”，用复数 "buildings" 更自然，并将时态改为现在时以反映持续状态。

× Actually, I don't, I don't, I don't, uh, imagine any change or any, uh, shortcomings of the, of our study places. But if I have to see, I think the, uh, the, the teaching room, which can.

✓ Actually, I can't think of any changes or shortcomings in our study places. But if I had to mention something, I would say the classrooms could be improved.

原句有大量重复和口语停顿（"I don't, I don't, I don't, uh"），并且句子未完成（"the teaching room, which can."）。句子结构不完整，需改为完整的陈述句并清晰表达假设和建议（使用条件式或情态动词）。建议使用 "I can't think of any..." 或 "I don't think there are any..."，后半句用完整结构如 "the classrooms could be improved."。

× I'm currently applying for a postgraduate program, UH, and I plan to have a master's degree in Communication Engineering because I want to specialize in Internet of Things and I think this way can help me.

✓ I'm currently applying for a postgraduate program, and I plan to get a master's degree in Communication Engineering because I want to specialize in the Internet of Things, and I think this will help me.

时态与搭配不当："plan to have a master's degree" 不自然，应使用 "plan to get/obtain a master's degree"。此外，"this way can help me" 表达笨拙，建议用将来时或情态动词更自然地表达目的和预期效果（"this will help me"）。另外去掉填充词 "UH"。