Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на ясной, краткой структуре ответа: сначала одно предложение, прямо отвечающее на вопрос (I am both a student and an employee), затем одно-два предложения с конкретными деталями. Избегайте слов-паразитов (uh) и повторов (education, educate). Используйте правильные фразы для описания формы обучения (correspondence course) и места работы (medical centre/clinic).

例: I am both a student and an employee. I study via a correspondence course at International University, and I currently work at a medical centre where I assist administrative tasks.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ в первом предложении (I study at ...). Затем добавьте одно конкретное уточнение о статусе (I will graduate soon) и избегайте грамматических ошибок и лишних фраз. Не используйте повторяющиеся или неясные слова (UH, I'm starting going to).

例: I study at International University. I will graduate soon and plan to work as a teacher for children with special educational needs.

提案: Отвечайте прямо сначала (Yes/No/Partly), затем объясните причину конкретно и кратко. Уточните, что вы имеете в виду под «vibe» и используйте простые фразы: I don't experience campus life, but the university suits my needs. Избегайте размытых оборотов и лишних повторов («good, good»).

例: Partly — I like the university because the courses and support meet my needs, but I don't experience campus life since I study by correspondence and only visit twice a year for exams.

提案: Хорошая структура ответа: короткий прямой ответ и конкретные примеры. Для улучшения – используйте связующие слова последовательно (Firstly, for example) и сократите длинные предложения. Можно добавить небольшое личное впечатление вместо общих фраз.

例: No, I wouldn't. For example, the university recently launched a student app and improved study spaces, which has made my studies much easier.

提案: Ответ логичен и последовательный, но избегайте неуверенных вводных («Well, I'm still deciding in the excite details») и исправьте фразы: practical experience, pursue a master's degree. Начните с ясного топик-сентенса, затем добавьте краткую мотивацию и временную последовательность.

例: I plan to gain practical experience by working in my field first, then later pursue a master's degree to deepen my knowledge and advance my career.

× I am uh, going to graduate university.

✓ I am going to graduate from university.

The verb phrase 'graduate' requires the preposition 'from' when indicating the institution you finish. Use 'graduate from university' to be grammatically correct.

× I studied in correspondence educate education for International University and since I became a student, I started work, I am working in medical house.

✓ I studied in the correspondence education program at International University, and since I became a student I started working; I am working in a medical center.

Use the noun phrase 'correspondence education' rather than 'correspondence educate education', use the preposition 'at' for institutions, and use the gerund 'working' after 'started'. 'Medical house' is not a natural collocation in English; 'medical center' or 'clinic' is more appropriate.

× As I mentioned it before, I'm starting going to finish the study in International University UH soon I am officially got my diploma and become UH teacher for specialized children.

✓ As I mentioned before, I'm about to finish my studies at International University; soon I will officially receive my diploma and become a teacher at UH for children with special needs.

Remove redundant 'it' after 'mentioned'. Use 'about to finish' or 'going to finish' and plural 'studies'. Use 'at' for institutions. Use future 'will officially receive' not 'am officially got'. 'Become a teacher at UH for children with special needs' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× As I mentioned before, I am studying correspondence education.

✓ As I mentioned before, I am studying through correspondence education.

Add 'through' to clarify the mode of study: 'studying through correspondence education' or 'studying by correspondence' are idiomatic.

× It's like I went to university twice a year for closing the semester for the test.

✓ I go to university twice a year to take exams at the end of the semester.

Use present simple 'I go' to describe habitual action, use 'to take exams' not 'for closing the semester for the test'. 'At the end of the semester' is the correct phrase.

× So actually I'm not at all feel the vibe of the university, but it's the good, good place for me.

✓ So actually I don't at all feel the vibe of the university, but it's a very good place for me.

Use auxiliary 'do' for negation in present simple: 'I don't feel'. 'Not at all' comes before the verb phrase: 'I don't feel the vibe at all'. Use article 'a' and 'very good' instead of repeated 'good, good'.

× No, I wouldn't. The university's reputation is improving and they're continually upgrading facilities and services.

✓ No, I wouldn't. The university's reputation is improving, and it is continually upgrading its facilities and services.

Use 'it' to refer to 'the university' (singular) and possessive 'its' for facilities. 'They're' implies plural which is incorrect here.

× For example, when I started first year we didn't have a dedicated student app, but now we do and they have added new programs and better study spaces, so there is nothing to change.

✓ For example, when I started my first year we didn't have a dedicated student app, but now we do, and the university has added new programs and better study spaces, so there is nothing to change.

Add possessive 'my' for 'first year'. Replace 'they' with 'the university' or 'it' to match singular. Use commas to separate clauses.

× Well, I'm still deciding in the excite details, but my plan is to start working in my profession first to gain a practical experience and then later pursue a master's degree, preferably in order to deepen my knowledge and advance my career.

✓ Well, I'm still deciding on the exact details, but my plan is to start working in my profession first to gain practical experience and then later pursue a master's degree to deepen my knowledge and advance my career.

Use 'deciding on' rather than 'deciding in' and 'exact details' instead of 'excite details'. Remove the article before 'practical experience' (no 'a'). The phrase 'preferably in order to' is wordy; use 'to' for purpose.