Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 문장 구조를 바로잡고 발화를 더 자연스럽게 만드세요. 현재는 어순과 시제, 관사 사용이 틀리고 군더더기가 있습니다. 간결한 주제 문장(학생임을 바로 답하기)과 한두 개의 구체적 이유를 연결어(for / because 등)로 자연스럽게 이어 말하세요. 예: 관사(a/an/the) 사용, 현재완료/과거 표현 정리, 불필요한 반복 제거.

例: I'm a student at the University of Hong Kong, where I major in Philosophy. I chose this subject because I enjoy thinking about big questions and analyzing different viewpoints, which keeps me intellectually engaged.

提案: 문장이 모호하고 논리 흐름이 깨집니다. 먼저 장소를 명확히 말한 뒤 이유를 하나 또는 두 개로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 'cozy mood' → 'a cozy atmosphere', 'there aren't many people' 등 자연스러운 표현 사용하고, 모순되는 문장('uncomfortable I comfortable chairs')은 정리하세요.

例: I usually study either at home or in the university library because I prefer a quiet, cozy atmosphere with few people around. I also like libraries because they have comfortable chairs and good lighting for reading.

提案: 좋은 구조(간단한 주제문 + 이유)를 사용했지만 문법과 문장 연결을 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 'places very quiet' 같은 표현을 'it's very quiet'로 고치고 연결어를 다양화하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 구체적인 예(시간대, 시설)를 추가하면 점수 상승에 도움이 됩니다.

例: Yes, it's a very good place to study because it's quiet and has many comfortable chairs. For example, I can usually concentrate better there in the mornings when it's almost empty.

提案: 의도를 명확히 전달하지 못하고 반복과 잡음이 많습니다. 구체적으로 어떤 변화를 원하느냐(더 편한 의자, 더 조용한 공간, 더 좋은 조명 등)를 말하고 이유와 한두 가지 예를 덧붙이세요. 중복되는 표현을 피하고 연결어(so, therefore, because)를 적절히 사용하세요.

例: Yes, I would like some improvements because I have a short attention span. For instance, better lighting and more private study booths would help me concentrate, so I could study for longer periods without getting distracted.

提案: 문장이 거의 알아듣기 어렵습니다. 먼저 계획을 명확한 주제문으로 말한 뒤, 기간과 목적을 구체적으로 정리하세요. 'If this test finished' 같은 표현 대신 'After this exam'을 쓰고, 'study for the ADSP test for three weeks'처럼 목적어와 기간을 정확히 배치하세요.

例: After this exam, I plan to prepare for the ADSP test. I intend to study full-time for about three weeks to review the main topics and take practice exams.

× I'm currently student in Hong Kong University and I major in philosophy because I'm always been a deep thinker and loved philosophy. Yeah.

✓ I'm currently a student at the University of Hong Kong, and I major in philosophy because I have always been a deep thinker and I love philosophy.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'student' and uses incorrect preposition 'in' instead of 'at' for the university name: use 'a student at the University of Hong Kong'. 'I'm always been' mixes present continuous and present perfect; correct is 'I have always been'. 'Loved' is past tense but the meaning is ongoing, so use present simple 'I love'. Also combine clauses with proper conjunction and punctuation for clarity. Suggestions: add the indefinite article before countable nouns, use correct prepositions for institutions, use present perfect for actions continuing to present, and use present simple for general states.

× I study at home or at university library because I like cozy mood and there aren't many people so I usually use their example. I like uncomfortable I comfortable chairs.

✓ I study at home or at the university library because I like a cozy atmosphere and there aren't many people, so I usually use the study spaces. I like comfortable chairs.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'university library'. 'Cozy mood' is unnatural; use 'cozy atmosphere'. 'Their example' is unclear; likely meant 'study spaces' or 'their facilities'. The phrase 'I like uncomfortable I comfortable chairs' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I like comfortable chairs'. Suggestions: use 'the' with specific places, choose appropriate nouns ('atmosphere' instead of 'mood'), avoid unclear pronouns, and ensure sentence fragments are combined into coherent sentences.

× Yes, I think that is a good place to study because there are many comfortable chairs and places very quiet so I can focus on my study.

✓ Yes, I think it is a good place to study because there are many comfortable chairs and the place is very quiet, so I can focus on my studies.

Reference pronoun 'that' is acceptable but 'it' is more natural. 'Places very quiet' is missing verb 'is' and needs article 'the place'. 'My study' should be plural 'my studies' for general study activities. Commas are needed to separate clauses. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb pairs are present, use appropriate articles, and use plural forms for general activities.

× Yes, I would. My concentration is very short. So when I study, when I study, I go to library or home or study cafe. Yeah. So circle. Circle.

✓ Yes, I would. My concentration span is very short, so when I study I go to the library, home, or a study café.

'My concentration is very short' is understandable but 'concentration span' (or 'attention span') is more natural. Repetition 'when I study, when I study' should be removed. Missing articles 'the library' and 'a study café'. 'So circle. Circle.' is unclear and should be omitted. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary repetition, use natural collocations like 'attention span' or 'concentration span', and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× If this test finished, AM I study about ADSP test and I I plan on the test for three weeks?

✓ If this test finishes, I will study for the ADSP test, and I plan to prepare for it for three weeks.

Condition clause should use present simple 'finishes' for a real future condition, not past 'finished'. 'AM I study' is incorrect word order and auxiliary usage; use 'I will study' or 'I will be studying'. 'Study about' is unidiomatic; use 'study for'. 'I I plan on the test for three weeks' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I plan to prepare for it for three weeks'. Suggestions: use first conditional structure (if + present simple, will + base verb), place auxiliaries correctly, use correct prepositions with 'study for', and avoid repetition.