Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief detail. Correct subject-verb agreement and singular/plural forms (e.g., “I am a molecular biology and genetics student”). Avoid repeating 'student' and unnecessary words.

例: I am a university student studying Molecular Biology and Genetics. I chose this field because I enjoy lab work and research.

提案: Give a clear location first, then one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect collocations (e.g., “has very good opportunities” not “has a really good opportunities”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I study in Istanbul at a well-known university. I chose it because it offers excellent career opportunities and Erasmus exchange programs, which could help me study abroad.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason with a linking word (e.g., “because”). Improve fluency by removing fillers (uh, umm) and correct phrasing (e.g., “lab facilities are adequate” not “good enough for a university”). Use a brief comparison if needed.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the university has adequate laboratory facilities for Molecular Biology and Genetics. In contrast, many public schools nearby lack similar lab equipment.

提案: State one clear change, explain why, and provide a specific suggestion. Avoid repetition and fillers and use correct vocabulary (e.g., “number of laboratories is low” and “each practical class should have a dedicated lab”). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like more laboratories because the current number is low for practical classes. For example, each course such as Biochemistry should have a dedicated lab so all students can carry out experiments.

提案: Give a clear plan in chronological order with correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid awkward structures (‘I was always wanted’) and be specific about steps (Master's, then PhD) and timelines. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I have always wanted to be a researcher. To achieve this, I plan to do a master's degree after graduation and then pursue a PhD to work in academic research.

× I am a student at university. I am molecular biology and genetics students.

✓ I am a student at university. I am studying molecular biology and genetics.

The original uses 'I am molecular biology and genetics students' which mixes singular 'I' with plural 'students' and misuses nouns instead of a verb phrase. Use the verb 'study' or 'am studying' to describe one's subject. Also keep subject-verb agreement ('I am a student' and 'I am studying...'). Suggestion: say 'I am studying molecular biology and genetics' or 'I study molecular biology and genetics.'

× I study in Istanbul.

✓ I study in Istanbul.

This sentence is acceptable but ensure correct preposition use for institutions or locations. 'In Istanbul' is correct for the city. No change needed.

× My university is batches here, which I found very improved university.

✓ My university is based here, and I find it a very good university.

'Is batches here' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'based here'. 'Which I found very improved university' mixes tenses and word forms. Use simple present 'I find it a very good university' to match ongoing opinion. Replace 'improved' with 'good' or 'impressive' depending on meaning. Suggestion: 'My university is based here, and I find it a very good university.'

× It has a really good opportunities for the future and I chose it because of that.

✓ It offers really good opportunities for the future, and I chose it for that reason.

'Has a really good opportunities' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'opportunities'. Use 'offers' or 'has' without 'a' and correct article usage. 'Because of that' is informal; 'for that reason' is clearer. Suggestion: 'It offers really good opportunities for the future.'

× It's has an Erasmus programs, et cetera.

✓ It has Erasmus programs, etc.

'It's has' incorrectly combines contraction 'it's' (it is) with 'has'. Use 'It has' only. Also 'an Erasmus programs' mixes singular article 'an' with plural 'programs' — remove the article or use singular 'an Erasmus program'. Suggestion: 'It has Erasmus programs.'

× For me it is good place because my major is molecular biology and genetics, so I need to work in lab and my university's lab conditions are uh, good enough for a university.

✓ For me it is a good place because my major is molecular biology and genetics, so I need to work in a lab and my university's lab conditions are good enough for a university.

Missing article 'a' before 'good place' and 'a lab'. Also remove filler 'uh' and ensure present tense consistency. 'Good enough for a university' is acceptable but could be rephrased. Suggestion: 'For me, it is a good place because my major is molecular biology and genetics, so I need to work in a lab.'

× For example, in umm government schools there is not such that conditions for the students.

✓ For example, in government schools there are not such conditions for the students.

Incorrect word order and verb number: 'there is' should be 'there are' to agree with plural 'conditions'. 'Not such that' is awkward; use 'there are not such conditions' or 'such conditions do not exist'. Suggestion: 'In government schools, such conditions are not available for students.'

× I would like to change a few things. For example, in my university laboratories numbers are quite low.

✓ I would like to change a few things. For example, the number of laboratories at my university is quite low.

'Laboratories numbers are quite low' is incorrect noun phrase order. Use 'the number of laboratories' to talk about quantity. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'number ... is'. Suggestion: 'The number of laboratories at my university is quite low.'

× For example, umm for each lesson there could be one lap.

✓ For example, for each lesson there could be one lab.

'One lap' is a misspelling of 'one lab' (laboratory). Remove filler 'umm'. The sentence structure is fine after correcting the word. Suggestion: 'For each lesson there could be one lab.'

× For example, in biochemistry it should be biochemistry lab.

✓ For example, in biochemistry there should be a biochemistry lab.

Word order and article missing: use 'there should be a biochemistry lab' to indicate existence. Add the article 'a' before 'biochemistry lab'. Suggestion: 'There should be a biochemistry lab for biochemistry courses.'

× I was always wanted to be a researcher.

✓ I have always wanted to be a researcher.

'I was always wanted' incorrectly uses past simple with 'always' to express a continuing desire. Use present perfect 'have always wanted' to indicate a desire that began in the past and continues now. Suggestion: 'I have always wanted to be a researcher.'

× For accomplish that I need to do masters degree after my graduation and then PhD when I will and when I will terminate that PhD.

✓ To accomplish that, I need to do a master's degree after graduation and then a PhD when I finish that PhD program.

Multiple errors: 'For accomplish that' should be 'To accomplish that'. 'Do masters degree' needs article and possessive: 'do a master's degree'. 'After my graduation' better as 'after graduation'. 'When I will and when I will terminate that PhD' is ungrammatical future phrasing — use 'when I finish that PhD program' or simply 'and then a PhD.' Also 'terminate' is wrong verb choice for completing a degree; use 'finish' or 'complete'. Suggestion: 'To accomplish that, I plan to do a master's degree after graduation and then a PhD.'