Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接且清晰，但可以更自然和口语化，避免重复“Senior High School student”和“currently”，並可加一個簡短的補充句以豐富內容。注意語調自然連貫。

例: I'm a senior at Zhengzhou Foreign Language School. I'm finishing my final year now and preparing for university entrance exams.

提案: 內容重複且有猶豫語（umm），句子冗長。應使用一個清晰的主句，然後用1–2句補充具體細節，並減少填充詞。

例: I study at Zhengzhou Foreign Language School, which is known for its strong academics and pleasant campus. I'm in the third year of high school and focus mainly on science subjects.

提案: 回答內容不完整並且有很多填充詞，最後一句未說完。應給出完整的支持細節並使用連接詞使語意連貫，避免重複。

例: Absolutely. The school combines a strong academic focus with a relaxed atmosphere. For example, we have Model United Nations and various clubs, and the teachers are very responsible and supportive.

提案: 回答內容具體且正面，但有發音填充詞與語法錯誤（"can offers UH quite enough"）。應修正語法，去掉猶豫語，並用一兩句總結理由。

例: To be honest, I wouldn't change much. The school has top-notch facilities, a beautiful campus and a strong academic atmosphere, and the teachers are both knowledgeable and responsible.

提案: 回答表達了清晰的計劃，但有語法問題（不定冠詞使用、時態與詞序）和填充詞。應用更流暢的句子提供具體原因或例子來支持選擇。

例: I plan to go to university and probably major in chemistry. I've been interested in chemistry since the first year of middle school because I find experiments and the way substances interact really fascinating.

× I'm a Senior High School student at Zhengzhou Foreign Language School currently.

✓ I'm a senior high school student at Zhengzhou Foreign Language School currently.

“Senior High School”在这里作普通名词使用，不需要全部首字母大写，应使用小写形式“senior high school”。此外，通常不需要在每个单词首字母大写，保持常规大小写规则即可。建议注意英文中专有名词与普通名词的大小写区分。

× I study at the Zhengzhou Foreign Language School, a really beautiful and attractive academic Senior High School and umm I'm senior umm, I'm senior three student currently.

✓ I study at Zhengzhou Foreign Language School, which is a really beautiful and attractive academic senior high school, and I'm currently a senior three student.

原句结构重复且混乱（多次出现“senior”并且大小写不当），缺少连接词和非限制性定语从句的正确表达。建议将学校描述放在同位语或定语从句中，并把年级表述合并为“I'm currently a senior three student”。同时注意普通名词小写。

× the environment of my school is both academic and relaxing.

✓ The environment of my school is both academic and relaxing.

句首需大写“The”。（此句主要是标点和大写问题，形容词用法本身正确。）建议写作中注意句首大写和标点完整性。

× You know, we have many extracurricular activities like modern United Nations or some school clubs, but uh, also it's uh, it's umm, academic.

✓ We have many extracurricular activities like a Model United Nations and various school clubs, and the school is also very academic.

原句中“modern United Nations”用词不当，应该是“Model United Nations”；“or some school clubs”表达口语且不正式，且后半句重复“it's it's”。建议使用明确名词并简洁表达，避免重复。

× You know, the teachers here are responsible and.

✓ The teachers here are responsible.

原句结尾残缺，出现不完整句。应删除多余的“and”并完成句子。建议书写时检查句子完整性，确保主谓宾齐全。

× So I think my school can offers UH quite enough.

✓ So I think my school can offer quite enough.

动词“offer”不应与第三人称单数形式“offers”连用“can offers”是错误组合。应使用情态动词后接动词原形“can offer”。此外句中“UH”应为口头语填充，书面应去除或替换。建议去掉语气词并使用“can offer quite a lot”或“can offer enough”。

× About my future study plan, you know I'm going to a university, maybe I will choose the chemistry as my major and umm I'm interested in chemistry since I was a junior one student.

✓ About my future study plan, I'm going to university; maybe I will choose chemistry as my major. I've been interested in chemistry since I was a junior one student.

“I'm going to a university”常说“going to university”；“choose the chemistry”中“the”不应与学科名连用；关于从过去持续到现在的兴趣，应使用现在完成时“I've been interested”而不是一般现在时“I'm interested ... since I was”。建议学科名前不加冠词，并用现在完成时描述从过去持续到现在的状态。

× I reckon that there is something magical attract me in chemistry.

✓ I reckon that there is something magical about chemistry that attracts me.

原句中“something magical attract me”缺少关系结构和正确动词形式，应使用“something... that attracts me”或“something magical about chemistry that attracts me”。此外“attract”需改为第三人称单数“attracts”以与先行词“something”一致。建议调整为定语从句并确保主谓一致。

× So maybe in the future I will study chemistry.

✓ So maybe in the future I will study chemistry.

句子语法正确，无需修改。只是口语中重复“maybe”和“in the future”二者可择一以更简洁表达。