Study— Part 1 採点レポート

× I work as a bureaucrat and I work for Reason Revitalization and Government of Japan.

✓ I work as a bureaucrat and I work for the Regional Revitalization Agency of the Government of Japan.

The original sentence had a naming/word choice issue rather than pure agreement; I corrected the organization name and added 'the' for a specific agency. Use 'the' when referring to a specific government agency. Also ensure the proper noun is clear: 'Regional Revitalization Agency of the Government of Japan' fits meaning better.

× I am alone in distributing subsidies to each municipality and I really enjoy this role because I can support citizens through.

✓ I am solely responsible for distributing subsidies to each municipality and I really enjoy this role because I can support citizens.

The phrase 'I am alone in distributing' is awkward; 'solely responsible for distributing' is a natural present-tense description of duties. 'Support citizens through' is incomplete; remove 'through' to complete the thought. Maintain simple present for habitual duties.

× I study in my house and sometimes in Starbucks when I want to shout aloud and memorize many things in my mind.

✓ I study at home and sometimes at Starbucks when I want to speak aloud and memorize many things.

Use 'at home' not 'in my house' for idiomatic present-tense routines. Use 'at Starbucks' for location. 'Shout aloud' is unnatural for quiet study; 'speak aloud' is more appropriate. 'Memorize many things in my mind' is redundant; 'memorize many things' suffices.

× I often study in the house because I can shout around in the house but in Starbucks I can concentrate on.

✓ I often study at home because I can speak aloud there, but at Starbucks I can concentrate better.

Use 'at home' and 'at Starbucks' as correct prepositions for locations. 'Shout around in the house' is awkward; use 'speak aloud there'. 'Concentrate on' is incomplete; use 'concentrate better' or 'concentrate on my work'.

× Yes it is Starbucks is suitable phrase for me because I can imagine my world and surrounded by adequate noise and the person.

✓ Yes, Starbucks is a suitable place for me because I can imagine my own world and be surrounded by an appropriate level of noise and other people.

Corrected word choice: 'place' not 'phrase'. Use article 'a' before 'suitable place'. 'Imagine my world' becomes 'imagine my own world'. 'Surrounded by adequate noise and the person' is ungrammatical; use 'be surrounded by an appropriate level of noise and other people'.

× Each person study hard or work hard and they offers me a lot of motivation to study hard.

✓ Each person studies hard or works hard, and they offer me a lot of motivation to study.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Each person' requires singular verb 'studies' and 'works'. 'They offers' is wrong; with 'they' use 'offer'. Also avoid repeating 'study hard' twice; simplify to 'motivation to study'.

× Yes, it was decisive the atmosphere surroundings of my city involvement is definitely important to of to my quality of study every time the article is strong.

✓ Yes. The atmosphere and surroundings of my city are definitely important to the quality of my study.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Reordered to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'The atmosphere and surroundings of my city are definitely important to the quality of my study.' Use plural verb 'are' for compound subject. Remove extraneous words.

× In future, I want to study more and more fields, including housing, building and budgeting through things that I want to be, uh, uh, professional of budgeting subsidies to municipalities.

✓ In the future, I want to study many more fields, including housing, construction, and budgeting so that I can become a professional in budgeting subsidies for municipalities.

Use 'In the future' and present/future intentions: 'I want to study many more fields'. 'Building' better as 'construction'. 'Through things that I want to be' is ungrammatical; replace with a purpose clause 'so that I can become'. Use 'professional in budgeting subsidies for municipalities' for natural phrasing.