Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Em nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I am a high school student) và loại bỏ từ thừa. Nếu muốn, thêm một câu ngắn giải thích về năm học hoặc lĩnh vực học tập. Hạn chế dùng từ như "actually" hay sắp xếp động từ sai.

例: I am a high school student. I am currently in my third year and I focus mainly on science subjects.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và chứa thông tin rối ("Is Saturday at 20 High School"). Em nên nói tên trường đúng, vị trí và khoảng cách một cách mạch lạc, sử dụng liên từ nếu thêm chi tiết. Tránh viết tắt hoặc cấu trúc sai.

例: I study at Saturday High School, which is about two kilometres from my home, so I can usually walk there in 20 minutes.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng nhưng diễn đạt lủng củng. Em nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason). Dùng linking words như "but" hoặc "however" để liên kết ý, và cụ thể hơn về điểm mạnh/điểm yếu của trường (ví dụ: trang thiết bị, giáo viên, cơ hội phát triển).

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and classes are well organised, but it lacks modern facilities for long-term development.

提案: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và không nêu thay đổi cụ thể. Em nên trình bày một đề xuất rõ ràng (ví dụ: nâng cấp thư viện, phòng lab) và giải thích lý do. Dùng cấu trúc điều kiện nếu cần: "If I could, I would...".

例: If I could make changes, I would upgrade the science laboratories and expand the library to provide more resources for students.

提案: Câu trả lời mơ hồ và sai ngữ pháp. Em nên nêu kế hoạch cụ thể (dự định học trường/ ngành nào, thời gian, mục tiêu) và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng như "I plan to..." hoặc "I hope to...". Tránh dùng "able" sai chỗ; dùng "I hope to attend" hoặc "I plan to attend".

例: I plan to attend University City next year to study computer science because I want to build a career in software development.

× I am a student currently as attend actually high school.

✓ I am currently a high school student.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and word order. Use 'currently' before the noun phrase and 'high school student' as the correct noun phrase. Remove unnecessary words 'as' and 'attend actually'. Suggestions: place adverbs like 'currently' before the noun or after the verb, and use the correct noun phrase 'high school student'.

× Is Saturday at 20 High School, which is only about two kilometers away from my home.

✓ I study at 20 High School, which is only about two kilometers away from my home.

The sentence lacks a proper subject and verb. Begin with 'I study at' to state where the student studies. 'Is Saturday' is incorrect in this context and likely a misordering. Suggestions: ensure each sentence has a subject and a verb that match the intended meaning.

× I think it's good enough to stay study here, but not too good to long term development.

✓ I think it's good enough to study here, but not very good for long-term development.

The original has incorrect word forms and placement: 'stay study' is ungrammatical, and 'not too good to long term development' misuses preposition and hyphenation. Use 'study here' and 'for long-term development' (hyphenate 'long-term' as a compound adjective when placed before a noun). Suggestions: use correct verb forms ('study'), proper prepositions ('for'), and hyphenate compound adjectives ('long-term'). Note: explanation in English as requested.

× If I have to propose some any improvement for my school, I would like to.

✓ If I had to suggest any improvements for my school, I would do so.

The phrase 'some any' is a conflicting combination of quantifiers. Also 'propose' is acceptable but 'suggest' collocates better with 'improvements'. Use past-subjunctive 'If I had to' for a hypothetical and 'improvements' plural when unspecified. Suggestions: avoid combining 'some' and 'any'; choose one quantifier appropriate to the context; use correct conditional structure.

× I'm able to attend University City I want.

✓ I will be able to attend the university in the city I want.

The original is missing articles and proper word order. Use 'the university in the city I want' or 'the university I want to attend in the city'. If speaking about future ability, include 'will' for future tense. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'university' when specifying. Suggestions: add necessary articles ('the') and rearrange phrases to place modifiers after the noun they describe; use appropriate future auxiliary when needed.