Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your status, then give one or two specific supporting details (grade and subjects). Use linking words sparingly. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "I am currently a student" not "I am. I study").

例: I am currently a student in the 11th grade at School No. 26. I study a range of subjects, mainly mathematics and English, because I want to prepare for university.

提案: Give a clear location first, then one or two specific details. Remove filler words and repetition. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas. Correct grammar and make details coherent (e.g., explain what you mean by "mandatory subjects").

例: I study in the Soak district of the Fergana region at a well-known local school. The school has strict rules and fixed timetables, and most classes focus on the core compulsory subjects.

提案: Answer directly and then support with two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., "column to study", "having"). Use linking words like 'because' or 'also' to structure your response. Improve sentence structure and clarity.

例: Yes, it's a good place to study because it is located in the countryside, so it is peaceful and quiet. Also, the strict rules and fixed timetables help students stay focused and disciplined.

提案: Give a clear suggestion and explain briefly why it would help. Avoid vague words like 'timid'—use 'calm' or 'quiet'. Combine ideas into one or two sentences and correct grammar (e.g., 'It could be improved by creating more quiet study areas and adding comfortable chairs').

例: Yes. It could be improved by creating more quiet study areas where students can concentrate, and by adding comfortable chairs to make long study sessions less tiring.

提案: Start with a clear statement of your main plan, then give two specific supporting details (what you are preparing and why). Remove hesitations and improve grammar ('I am planning to study in the USA' and 'I am preparing in English and math because I want to study economics').

例: I plan to study in the USA for university because I want an international education. Right now I am preparing by improving my English and strengthening my math skills since I intend to study economics.

× Well, currently I am a student. I am. I study in the 11th grade at school #26 and now I'm finally your student and I study a range of subjects including math and English.

✓ Well, currently I am a student. I study in the 11th grade at School No. 26, and now I'm finally your student. I study a range of subjects, including math and English.

Pronoun and sentence structure issues: 'I am. I study' is fragmented and repetitive. Use complete sentences and combine clauses with conjunctions for clarity. Capitalize proper noun 'School No. 26' and add commas to separate items in a list. Suggestion: Remove repeated short fragments, join related ideas with 'and', and punctuate lists with commas.

× Well, uh, I, I study at Fergana region soak district, uh, my school is uh, famous and in my, in my schools has strict rules, uh, strict rules and the fixed timetables, uh, in my school only mandatory subject.

✓ I study in the Sozak district of Fergana Region. My school is famous and has strict rules and fixed timetables. Only mandatory subjects are taught at my school.

Multiple sentence structure problems and word order errors: 'Fergana region soak district' is incorrectly ordered and possibly misspelled (Sozak). 'in my schools has strict rules' mixes subjects and verbs incorrectly. Break into clear sentences, place modifiers correctly ('in the Sozak district of Fergana Region'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('school... has'), and correct noun phrases ('mandatory subjects'). Suggestion: Use short clear sentences, confirm proper place names, and keep subject-verb order standard (subject + verb + object).

× Yes, absolutely it's a good place to study. Firstly my school located in countryside is quite peaceful and the column to study and it has a strict strict rules and the fixed timetables in my schools only study a mandatory subjects and also having.

✓ Yes, absolutely it's a good place to study. Firstly, my school is located in the countryside and is quite peaceful and calm for studying. It has strict rules and fixed timetables, and only mandatory subjects are taught there.

Present tense and agreement errors: 'my school located' misses the auxiliary verb 'is'. 'column to study' is incorrect word choice; 'calm for studying' fits meaning. 'strict strict rules' is redundant. Ensure verbs are present tense with correct auxiliaries and plural agreement ('subjects are taught'). Suggestion: Include the verb 'is' after the subject when using present simple, avoid repetition, and choose appropriate adjectives ('calm').

× Yes, absolutely. I. It could be improved creating more timid quiet place areas and also adding comfortable chairs also.

✓ Yes, absolutely. It could be improved by creating quieter areas and by adding comfortable chairs.

Incorrect verb form after modal-like structure: 'could be improved creating' needs a passive construction with 'by' plus gerund or infinitive. 'timid quiet place areas' uses incorrect adjective and word order; 'quieter areas' conveys the idea. Remove redundant 'also'. Suggestion: Use 'could be improved by' + gerund for passive improvements and streamline adjectives ('quieter areas').

× Well, that's interesting question. I have a lot of plans for my future. Uh, firstly, uh, I'm planning to go to, I planning to go to the USA for studying and now I'm preparing for English and the math because I choose economic fields.

✓ Well, that's an interesting question. I have a lot of plans for my future. Firstly, I'm planning to go to the USA to study, and now I'm preparing in English and math because I chose the field of economics.

Present tense and article errors: 'that's interesting question' needs 'an'. 'I planning to go' is missing auxiliary 'am'. Use 'to study' instead of 'for studying'. Tense mismatch: 'because I choose' should be past 'chose' if decision already made, or 'choose' if habitual—here 'chose' fits context. Use 'the field of economics' for correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Use correct articles ('an'), include auxiliary verbs for continuous forms ('am planning'), use infinitive 'to study', and ensure consistent tense ('chose') and accurate noun phrases ('field of economics').