Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "management"). Add one brief detail about where or what you will study. Use linking phrase for clarity.

例: I am a student. This year I will go to university to study management at a British university. I chose the UK because its business programs are well respected.

提案: Answer directly then give one specific supporting detail. Remove hesitations and correct grammar ("There are many universities in Vietnam"). Use a linking word like "because" or "for example" to explain why it's good.

例: I study at a university in Vietnam. There are many good universities here, so I expect to gain a lot of practical experience and meet students from different backgrounds.

提案: Make a clear reasoned answer with correct vocabulary. State one or two specific reasons using linking words and avoid unclear words. For example, say "teachers are friendly" or "there are good facilities."

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers are friendly and supportive, and there are good facilities such as modern libraries and computer labs.

提案: Directly answer whether you want changes and specify one realistic change the university could make (e.g., more practical classes or better career services). Use a linking phrase to explain how that change would help you improve.

例: Yes, I would like more practical workshops and internships. This change would help me improve my management skills and prepare me for the workplace.

提案: Give a structured plan: start with short-term goals, then long-term goals. Use correct vocabulary ("improve my English", "study company management", "work for my community"). Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words like "first", "then", "after that".

例: First, I will improve my English to a higher level. Then I will study company management, and afterwards I hope to work on community projects that apply my management skills.

× I am a student and, uh, this year I will go to university, uh, to study, uh, umm, managers, uh, I think I will go a British university, yeah.

✓ I am a student, and this year I will go to a British university to study management.

The sentence has run-on structure and incorrect word choice. Combine ideas into one clear sentence, use 'a British university' (article + adjective + noun), and use the noun 'management' instead of 'managers'. Also remove filler words. Use correct word order: purpose clause 'to study management'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, I study at university in Vietnam.

✓ I study at a university in Vietnam.

Missing indefinite article before 'university'. Use 'a university' when speaking generally about one institution. This fixes the 'there be'/'article' context for countable nouns. Grammar problem type ID:3

× Uh, I think in Vietnam have many universities.

✓ I think there are many universities in Vietnam.

The original omits the existential 'there are' needed to state existence. Correct word order is 'there are many universities in Vietnam'. This is an existence clause. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And, uh, I will have many, uh, experience when I study and yeah.

✓ And I will gain a lot of experience while I study.

'Experience' is an uncountable noun that requires 'a lot of' for quantity; use 'gain' instead of 'have' for natural collocation. Use 'while I study' for concurrent action. Removed fillers. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Yes, I think it's a good place to study, uh, because, uh, I study all of, uh, bike English and uh, many T-shirt, uh, who very, uh, friendly and many friends.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place to study because I study English and many of my teachers and classmates are very friendly.

The original is confused with incorrect words ('bike', 'T-shirt') and poor structure. Clarify intended meaning: 'study English' and 'many of my teachers and classmates are very friendly'. Use correct subject-verb agreement and noun phrases. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, yes, I think, uh, if I have uh, chances to my life, in my life, I will to, I will uh, improve myself, uh, too much and I think. Umm, I will study better than.

✓ Yes, I think if I have opportunities in my life, I will improve myself a lot and study harder.

Use 'opportunities' instead of 'chances to my life', correct preposition 'in my life'. Remove extraneous 'to' after 'will'. Replace 'too much' (which is negative) with 'a lot' for positive meaning, and use 'study harder' for comparative idea. Simplify sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Uh, firstly I think I will study, uh, I also, uh, my English and then I will to study about, umm, manage company and then I will, uh, do my community.

✓ Firstly, I will improve my English, then I will study company management, and after that I will do community work.

Original mixes tenses and lacks verbs ('I also, my English'). Use 'improve my English' (verb + object), 'study company management' for intended field, and 'do community work' to express intended activity. Remove incorrect 'to' after 'will' and clarify sequence with 'firstly', 'then', 'after that'. Grammar problem type ID:6