Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, combine information into one concise sentence, and add a brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'I'm' twice).

例: I'm currently a master's student in Statistics and Applied Economics, and I'm focusing on data analysis and econometrics to prepare for a career in research or industry.

提案: Provide a clearer, grammatical sentence with a topic sentence first, then a specific detail about the location; use a linking word to connect ideas and correct word order (e.g., 'I study at...').

例: I study at the International Higher School of Statistics and Applied Economics, which is located in a small village called Kalia; the rural setting makes it peaceful and focused for study.

提案: Use more natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g., 'many good professors' not 'a lot of good professors'), and give a specific reason or example using a linking word to support your opinion.

例: Yes, it's an excellent place to study because there are many dedicated professors who offer hands-on support, and the pleasant climate helps me concentrate during long study sessions.

提案: Make the suggestion concise and grammatically correct (e.g., 'I would suggest opening...'); add a brief reason or benefit using a linking word to explain why the change is needed.

例: Yes, I would suggest opening more cafeterias and small restaurants on campus because students currently have limited options, and this would save time and improve campus life.

提案: Clarify your career plan with correct terminology and logical sequence; avoid vague phrases like 'the foresight statistics.' Use linking words to connect study and career goals and give a specific intention or timeline.

例: I plan to complete a degree in statistical engineering, and then within a few years I hope to start a small analytics company that offers forecasting and data-driven decision support to local businesses.

× I'm doing my master degree in statistics and applied economics.

✓ I'm doing my master's degree in statistics and applied economics.

Use the possessive form master's (or 'a master's degree') because 'master degree' is ungrammatical. The noun 'degree' is modified by a possessive or an article plus master's; use the apostrophe + s to show the type of degree.

× I'm finishing my studies International Higher School of Statistics and Applied Economics in a small village called Kalia.

✓ I'm finishing my studies at the International Higher School of Statistics and Applied Economics in a small village called Kalia.

Missing preposition 'at' before the institution name. English requires a preposition (at/in) to link 'studies' with the place. Add 'the' before the school name to indicate a specific institution.

× It is a magnificent place to do your academic classes.

✓ It is a magnificent place to take your academic classes.

While 'do your academic classes' is understandable, native speakers usually say 'take classes' or 'attend classes.' Also 'academic classes' is acceptable; replace 'do' with 'take' for idiomatic usage.

× There is a lot of good professors and teachers and a nice climate.

✓ There are a lot of good professors and teachers and a nice climate.

Agreement between subject and verb: 'professors and teachers' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is.' Also 'a lot of' is acceptable with plural nouns. This addresses subject-verb agreement as well.

× Yes, I would suggest to open more cafeterias and more restaurants so the students can have a place where to eat or drink.

✓ Yes, I would suggest opening more cafeterias and restaurants so students have places to eat and drink.

After 'suggest' use the -ing form (gerund) rather than 'to' + infinitive. Also simplify 'more cafeterias and more restaurants' to 'cafeterias and restaurants' and change 'a place where to eat or drink' to 'places to eat and drink' for natural phrasing.

× Well, I'm planning to get my statistics engineer degree and then open my own business, a small company and the foresight statistics.

✓ Well, I'm planning to get my degree in statistical engineering and then open my own business, a small company offering forecasting/statistics services.

The phrase 'statistics engineer degree' is awkward; prefer 'degree in statistical engineering' or 'a statistics engineering degree.' Also 'the foresight statistics' is unclear; likely intended 'forecasting/statistics services.' Adjust word order and noun forms to be natural in English.