Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I am a student"). Use correct tense and grammatical forms, avoid repetition, and add one brief supporting detail about what you will study or when you will start. Keep it to no more than 2–3 sentences.

例: I am a student. I have just finished school and passed my final exams, so I will start studying at university next month to pursue a degree in computer science.

提案: Give a clear, well-structured answer: state the place first, then one or two specific details. Avoid repeating phrases. Use correct word order and simple linking words to improve coherence.

例: I study at Battery High School, which I attend every weekday. I like my school because it has good facilities and friendly teachers.

提案: Answer directly (Yes or No) and provide 1–2 specific reasons with clear vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect word choices. Use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the classrooms are comfortable and quiet, and the teachers are well qualified. Also, the school has a peaceful environment that helps me concentrate.

提案: Avoid emotional language like "hate" in formal tests. Give a polite, specific reason for wanting a change and suggest a constructive improvement. Use complete sentences and reduce hesitation sounds (uh, um).

例: Yes, I would like one change: I wish teachers were more supportive. For example, my current teacher can be strict and not very encouraging, so I would appreciate more patience and clearer feedback on my work.

提案: State your future plans clearly with correct verb forms. Give specific details about what you will study and why. Use linking words like "because" to explain the purpose and keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I plan to learn Python and take courses in web development because I want a career in software development. I believe these skills will help me succeed at university and in my future job.

× So I can say I will be a student because I am finished my school and I'm passed the exam and. And I will. I will do.

✓ I will be a student because I have finished school and I have passed the exam.

The sentence mixes present and past forms and uses 'am finished' incorrectly. Use present perfect 'have finished' and 'have passed' to indicate completed actions relevant to the future plan. Remove fragments 'And I will. I will do.' and keep a single clear future statement.

× High school I'm studying in my high school is battery and I'm going to school every day and I like my school.

✓ I study at Battery High School and I go to school every day. I like my school.

The original uses awkward word order 'High school I'm studying in' and redundant continuous tense. Use simple present 'I study' and 'I go' for habitual actions. Use proper noun order 'Battery High School'.

× It's yes because this is place is comfortable and and this is well qualified.

✓ Yes, it's a comfortable place and it is well qualified.

The phrase 'It's yes' is incorrect; start with 'Yes,'. Duplicate 'this is place' is ungrammatical and missing article. Use 'a comfortable place'. 'Well qualified' is odd for a place but can be kept if meaning 'well-equipped' or 'well-qualified staff'. Use correct subject-verb structure.

× It's a good place to where the snow isn't quite because this is good place.

✓ It's a good place to study because the environment is peaceful and pleasant.

The original is unclear and ungrammatical: 'a good place to where the snow isn't quite' makes no sense. Rephrase to a coherent reason that fits the question. Ensure complete clause with subject and verb.

× Yes, I wanna, I wanna uh, change, uh, my teacher because I hate her and uh, I think, uh, she, uh, she, she's not, umm, she's not privileges Yeah, she's not kind and.

✓ Yes, I would like to change my teacher because I dislike her and I think she is not kind.

Colloquial 'wanna' should be formal 'would like'. Remove filler words. 'She's not privileges' is incorrect; likely intended 'not strict' or 'not professional' but here 'not kind' fits. Use modal 'would like' for polite request.

× My future plans is is learning learning Python And flats are because this is my feature job and I think this is helped me for my university.

✓ My future plan is to learn Python and programming because this will help me for university and my future job.

Several issues: repeated words and wrong verb forms. Use singular/plural consistency: 'plan is'. Use infinitive 'to learn' after 'plan'. 'Flats' unclear; replace with 'programming' or 'software development'. Use future 'will help' for intended benefit. Correct 'feature' to 'future'.