Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: state your current status in one direct sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like "pre" or "forget all I score." Use correct verb forms (e.g., "preparing to apply").

例: I am not currently working or studying; I am preparing to apply for a master's degree in Ireland. At the moment I am focusing on improving my English by taking online courses and practicing speaking daily.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then explain briefly with clear reasons using linking words. Replace vague phrases like "speak English loudly" with clearer explanations (e.g., "practice speaking aloud").

例: I study at home because it lets me practice speaking English aloud without disturbing others. If I went to the library, I would feel awkward speaking out loud and there would be no private space for conversation practice.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and remove repetition. Explain why it’s not good and mention one or two obstacles clearly.

例: Not really. Although I can speak aloud at home, there are many obstacles: it’s often noisy and I don’t have a quiet, well-equipped workspace. Therefore I find it hard to concentrate and use study materials effectively.

提案: Be specific about the changes and give one or two clear reasons. Use complete sentences and avoid hesitations. Mention practical improvements (e.g., air conditioner, a private room) and explain how they would help your study.

例: Yes, I would. I would like an air conditioner because it’s very warm and makes it hard to concentrate. I would also prefer a private corner or a door I can close so I can practice speaking without worrying about my parents listening.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then give concise reasons and one example of what interests you. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "Human-Computer Interaction") and avoid fillers.

例: I plan to study Human-Computer Interaction at master's level because I am interested in analyzing and organizing user data to design better interfaces. For example, I want to research how people interact with mobile apps to improve usability and accessibility.

× Uh, right now I'm not working or studying, but I am pre.

✓ Uh, right now I'm not working or studying, but I am preparing.

The student used 'pre', an incomplete word. This is a present tense context describing current activity, so use the present participle 'preparing' to indicate an ongoing action. Suggestion: use full verb forms and present progressive for current actions (I am preparing).

× I'm preferring for applying to master's degree in Ireland.

✓ I'm preparing to apply for a master's degree in Ireland.

'Prefer' is a stative verb and rarely used in continuous form; 'prefer' is incorrect here. Also the structure 'prefer for applying' is wrong. Use 'preparing to apply for' to show intention and correct verb patterns: 'prepare to do something' and 'apply for a degree'.

× So I'm studying English. Yeah, forget all I score.

✓ So I'm studying English. Yeah, forget all I said.

'Forget all I score' is ungrammatical: 'score' is wrong word choice. Likely intended 'said'. Also 'forget all I said' uses correct past tense for something already spoken. Suggestion: use 'said' for previous utterances and past tense after 'forget'.

× I study at home because I can speak English and listen to English loudly.

✓ I study at home because I can speak English out loud and listen to English at a high volume.

'Speak English loudly' is understandable but more natural is 'speak English out loud'. 'Listen to English loudly' is awkward; use 'listen to English at a high volume' or 'listen to English aloud'. Also adjust collocations: 'speak out loud' and 'listen at a high volume'.

× If I go to library, it's difficult to speak.

✓ If I go to the library, it's difficult to speak.

English requires the definite article 'the' before 'library' when referring to a specific place. Use 'the library' rather than 'library'.

× No it isn't, but I don't have any choice to study English at the moment because I need to speak English loudly, but it's it have lots of the obstacle.

✓ No, it isn't, but I don't have any choice to study English at the moment because I need to speak English out loud, and it has a lot of obstacles.

Multiple issues: 'speak English loudly' replaced with 'speak English out loud' for naturalness; 'it's it have' is ungrammatical—use 'it has'; 'lots of the obstacle' incorrect article and number—use 'a lot of obstacles'. Also replace comma with 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify clauses and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it has').

× Yes, I would because, uh, because here is a warm at the moment and uh, my parents, yeah listen to my speak speaking.

✓ Yes, I would, because it's warm here at the moment and my parents listen to me speak.

'Here is a warm' is incorrect word order and word form; use 'it's warm here'. 'Listen to my speak speaking' is ungrammatical—use 'listen to me speak' or 'listen to my speaking'. Also remove repeated 'because'. Suggestion: use correct subject 'it' with 'is' and object pronoun 'me' after 'listen to'.

× So I want you uh, set up air conditioner and want to uh.

✓ So I want to have an air conditioner installed.

The original is fragmented and addresses the examiner awkwardly ('I want you... set up'). For a clear statement of desire, use 'I want to have an air conditioner installed' or 'I want my parents to install an air conditioner'. This corrects verb structure and completes the sentence. Suggestion: express wishes with 'want to' + base verb or causative 'have something done'.

× Umm, I'd love to study human computer interaction because I prefer analyzing, collecting, umm, organizing data from human thought.

✓ Umm, I'd love to study human–computer interaction because I prefer analyzing, collecting, and organizing data about human thought.

Use hyphenated 'human–computer interaction' and parallel structure for the list: 'analyzing, collecting, and organizing'. Also 'data from human thought' is better as 'data about human thought'. 'I'd love to study' is correct conditional present; keep tense but improve parallelism and preposition choice.