School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct location statement first, then one concise supporting detail. Avoid hesitation words and incorrect prepositions. Use a clear sentence structure: subject + verb + location, then a linked reason using 'because' or 'because of'.

例: My school is in the suburbs of Beijing. It is very convenient for transport because several bus and subway lines stop nearby.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific supportive reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Use accurate collocations (e.g. 'beautiful scenery', 'responsible teachers', 'learn a lot'). Avoid repetition and fix grammar errors. Keep under five sentences.

例: Yes, I like my school because it has beautiful scenery and a peaceful campus. Also, the teachers are very responsible, so we can learn a lot from them.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + reason), then give a concrete supporting detail. Use natural phrases like 'good place to study' and 'study resources' or 'learning environment'. Avoid vague phrases like 'more study knowledge'.

例: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because it offers excellent learning resources and a quiet study environment, such as well-equipped classrooms and study areas.

提案: Begin with a topic sentence describing the overall environment, then give specific sensory details. Use correct noun forms and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce specifics. Express feelings clearly (e.g. 'it feels relaxing').

例: The environment at my school is peaceful and green. For example, the library is surrounded by many flowerbeds, which makes the area feel relaxing and cheerful.

提案: State your opinion clearly about importance of interest, then explain why with specific reasons and examples. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'motivation' or 'interest') and grammar. Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words such as 'because' or 'therefore'.

例: I think interest in studying is very important because it motivates us to keep learning even when the work is difficult. For example, when I enjoy a subject I spend more time practicing and my grades improve.

× Hmm, why school is in province of Beijing? It's very convenient for transport.

✓ Hmm, why is the school in the Beijing province? It is very convenient for transportation.

The sentence uses incorrect word order for a question; English requires inversion of subject and auxiliary (There be issue ID 3 applies because sentence structure with 'be' is wrong). Also 'school' needs a definite article 'the' and 'province of Beijing' should be 'Beijing province' or 'the Beijing province'. 'It's very convenient for transport' uses informal 'transport' and needs 'transportation' or 'public transport'. Suggestion: Use subject-auxiliary inversion for questions, include articles where needed, and prefer 'transportation' or 'public transport'.

× Of course, our school has convenient transport, beautiful scenery in there.

✓ Of course, our school has convenient transportation and beautiful scenery there.

The phrase 'in there' is incorrect; use 'there' without a preposition. Also 'transport' should be 'transportation' or 'public transport'. Combine ideas with 'and'. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary prepositions and use natural collocations: 'convenient transportation' and 'beautiful scenery there'.

× Many teachers are responsibility for their children.

✓ Many teachers are responsible for their students.

'Responsible' is the correct adjective; 'responsibility' is a noun. Also 'their children' likely means 'their students' in a school context. Suggestion: Use the adjective 'responsible' after 'are' and choose the correct noun for the context.

× We can learn more knowledge.

✓ We can learn more and gain more knowledge.

The phrase 'learn more knowledge' is awkward; English prefers 'learn more' or 'gain more knowledge'. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'learn more' or 'gain knowledge'.

× Knowledge is from from them.

✓ Knowledge comes from them.

Double 'from' is a typo and 'is from' is less natural than 'comes from'. This is an incorrect preposition/word choice issue (ID 11). Suggestion: Use 'comes from' to express origin.

× Of course my school has more study knowledge and study environments.

✓ Of course, my school has more learning resources and a good study environment.

'Study knowledge' and 'study environments' are unnatural collocations; restructure the sentence to use 'learning resources' and 'study environment'. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Suggestion: Use common collocations and pluralization appropriately.

× The libraries of the library is surrounded by so many flowers.

✓ The library is surrounded by many flowers.

The phrase 'The libraries of the library' is incorrect and redundant. Use singular 'library' with singular verb 'is'. Also 'so many' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural here. This is a subject-verb agreement and structure error (ID 27). Suggestion: Simplify to 'The library is surrounded by many flowers.'

× When I say these flowers are filled, very relaxed and happy.

✓ When I see these flowers, I feel very relaxed and happy.

'Say these flowers are filled' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'see' and 'feel'. This is misuse of verbs/adverbs (ID 13). Suggestion: Use verbs that match meaning: 'see' and 'feel'.

× I think good moves is very important in treated in studies because women made some difficult.

✓ I think a positive attitude is very important in studying because studying can be difficult.

This sentence has multiple incorrect word choices: 'good moves' should be 'a positive attitude', 'is' must agree with singular subject (covered by restructuring), 'in treated in studies' is incorrect and should be 'in studying', and 'women made some difficult' is unintelligible; likely intended 'studying can be difficult'. These are adjective/adverb and sentence structure errors (ID 13 and 26). Suggestion: Use clear, common expressions: 'a positive attitude' and 'studying can be difficult'.

× We keep a good moves, they can helped us to keep on going how to studies and learn.

✓ If we maintain a positive attitude, it can help us keep going with our studies and learning.

Pronoun and verb forms are incorrect: 'We keep a good moves' mixes plural/singular and nouns; 'they can helped us' combines incorrect pronoun reference and wrong verb form 'helped' (past) after modal; 'how to studies and learn' is wrong. This involves incorrect pronouns and verb forms (ID 12 and ID 9/6). Suggestion: Use conditional structure 'If...it can help...', correct modal construction 'can help', and use gerunds 'studies' -> 'studying' or 'our studies'.