Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense: say what activities you tried and give one specific example. Use natural collocations such as “take part in activities” or “try new activities,” rather than “tackle activity.” Avoid incomplete and confusing sentences such as “They can it allows them to improve.” A clear topic sentence followed by one reason and one example would make the answer more effective.

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I joined a swimming class and played basketball at school. These activities helped me become more confident and learn how to work with other children.

提案: State your opinion clearly and use a logical reason. The answer contains many repetitions and unclear phrases, including “what do I what do” and “improve your serving operating.” Use “an essential” instead of “a essential,” and explain how trying different things can help people discover their interests or develop useful skills.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. This allows them to discover their interests and develop new skills. For instance, someone who tries volunteering might realize that they enjoy helping others and decide to pursue a career in social work.

提案: Give a definite answer first, then explain when you might accept or reject an opportunity. Use the natural phrase “make the most of opportunities,” and avoid repeating “make it” and “I’m.” Also, complete the answer instead of ending with an unfinished phrase. A brief contrast, such as accepting opportunities that support your goals, would improve clarity.

例: Yes, I generally enjoy taking on new opportunities because they help me grow. However, I consider whether I have enough time and whether the opportunity is relevant to my goals. Even when something is difficult, I usually try to make the most of it.

提案: Answer the frequency question directly by saying how often you receive opportunities. The university example is relevant, but “what to you about the opportunity” is unclear and “I feel thank” should be “I feel thankful” or “I’m grateful.” Improve the structure by mentioning one or two specific opportunities and linking them to your family’s support.

例: Yes, I often get new opportunities, especially through my university. For example, I have been able to attend workshops and join student projects. My parents and brother encourage me to take part in these activities, so I’m very grateful for their support.

× Yes, of course I have a chance to take a diverse activity when I was young.

✓ Yes, of course, I had a chance to take part in a diverse activity when I was young.

The time expression when I was young refers to the past, so have must change to the past-tense form had. The phrase take part in is the correct expression for participating in an activity.

× Yes, of course I have a chance to take a diverse activity when I was young.

✓ Yes, of course, I had a chance to take part in diverse activities when I was young.

The answer refers to activities in general, so the plural noun activities is more appropriate than the singular noun activity.

× You know, to tackle activity is very important factor for growing children.

✓ You know, taking part in activities is very important for growing children.

When an activity is used as the subject of a sentence, the gerund form taking is more natural and grammatically appropriate than the infinitive to tackle in this context.

× You know, to tackle activity is very important factor for growing children.

✓ You know, taking part in activities is a very important factor for growing children.

The singular countable noun factor needs the article a. The general idea of participating in activities is expressed with the plural noun activities.

× They can it allows them to improve

✓ They can allow children to improve.

A modal verb such as can must be followed by the base form of a verb. Therefore, can allows is incorrect; can allow is correct. The unnecessary pronoun it has also been removed.

× Yes, it's a essential thing for living our lived lives to challenge you about what do I what do what do we don't know where it's going to be helpful to improve your serving operating?

✓ Yes, it is an essential part of life to challenge ourselves by trying things we do not know about.

The article a changes to an before the vowel sound in essential. The phrase an essential part is also more grammatically complete than a essential thing in this sentence.

× Yes, it's a essential thing for living our lived lives to challenge you about what do I what do what do we don't know where it's going to be helpful to improve your serving operating?

✓ Yes, it is essential for us to challenge ourselves by trying things we do not know about.

The pronouns you and your do not match the speaker's intended meaning. When speaking generally about people including the speaker, us and ourselves are appropriate.

× Yes, it's a essential thing for living our lived lives to challenge you about what do I what do what do we don't know where it's going to be helpful to improve your serving operating?

✓ Yes, it is essential for us to challenge ourselves by trying things we do not know about, because this can help us improve our skills.

The original sentence contains repeated and incomplete question structures, such as what do I and what do we. Reorganizing the ideas into a clear main clause and because-clause makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× It depends on what opportunity if I get but I'm trying to take a most of opportunity whatever it is or it even make it even make me harder, but yeah, I'm I'm really

✓ It depends on what opportunities I get, but I try to take advantage of most opportunities, whatever they are, even if they make things more difficult for me.

The speaker is discussing opportunities in general, so opportunities is needed in both places. The plural pronoun they agrees with the plural noun opportunities.

× It depends on what opportunity if I get but I'm trying to take a most of opportunity whatever it is or it even make it even make me harder, but yeah, I'm I'm really

✓ It depends on what opportunities I get, but I try to take advantage of most opportunities, whatever they are, even if they make things more difficult for me.

The correct quantifier phrase is most opportunities, not a most of opportunity. The expression take advantage of is also the correct structure for using opportunities.

× It depends on what opportunity if I get but I'm trying to take a most of opportunity whatever it is or it even make it even make me harder, but yeah, I'm I'm really

✓ It depends on what opportunities I get, but I try to take advantage of most opportunities, whatever they are, even if it makes things more difficult for me.

In the clause even if it makes things more difficult, the subject it is third-person singular, so the verb must be makes, not make.

× I'm not sure what to you about the opportunity but about my university yes I have got so many opportunities because my brother and my parents always support me I feel thank for that.

✓ I'm not sure what to tell you about opportunities, but at my university, I have had many opportunities because my brother and my parents always support me.

The correct preposition for referring to a university as a place or institution is at. The phrase what to tell you is also required after what to introduce the intended meaning.

× I'm not sure what to you about the opportunity but about my university yes I have got so many opportunities because my brother and my parents always support me I feel thank for that.

✓ I'm not sure what to tell you about opportunities, but at my university, I have had many opportunities because my brother and my parents always support me. I feel thankful for that.

Thank is normally used as a verb, but after feel, an adjective is needed. Thankful is the correct adjective, and thankful for is the correct combination.