Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接提到了参加足球队，主题明确，也提供了父亲影响这一具体原因。不过，时态和语法错误较多，例如“catched”应改为“took”或“seized”，“I'm...when I was...”应改为过去时“ I was...”，“I go”应改为“I started playing”，“college school team”表达不自然。最后一句与童年经历的时间关系不清，可以说明你后来在学校球队继续踢球。建议使用“First..., because..., As a result...”等连接词，并将答案控制在3—4句，使内容更连贯自然。

例: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I had the opportunity to join a football team, and I was really excited about it. My father introduced me to the sport because he was a big football fan, so I started playing regularly. As a result, I later became a member of my school football team.

提案: 回答表达了“人们应该尝试不同事物”的观点，但有明显重复和句子不完整的问题。“a whole life is about the challenge and to take the challenge”不自然，可以改为“Life is full of challenges, and people should be willing to face them”。“try to feel it and try to take it”含义不清且重复，应具体说明尝试新事物的好处，例如发现兴趣、培养能力或增强自信。“will found”应改为“will find”。建议采用“观点+原因+结果”的结构，并用“By doing so”或“For example”连接细节。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of things, especially when they are young. By doing so, they can discover their interests and develop abilities they might not know they had. For example, trying a new sport or learning a musical instrument can build confidence and open up new opportunities.

× Yeah, definitely I got an opportunity to get into a football team and I catched the opportunity.

✓ Yeah, definitely. I got an opportunity to join a football team, and I caught it.

“Catched”不是正确的过去式，catch的过去式是不规则形式“caught”。因为这里描述的是童年发生过的事情，所以使用一般过去时。

× Actually I'm a super football fan when I was a little child it's because of my dad.

✓ Actually, I was a huge football fan when I was a little child because of my dad.

“When I was a little child”表示过去时间，因此主句也应使用过去时“was”，不能使用现在时“am”。原句把两个完整意思直接连接在一起，结构不清楚；去掉“it’s”后，句子更加完整、自然。

× So I go to play football then.

✓ So I went to play football then.

这里谈论的是童年发生的事情，所以动词“go”应使用过去式“went”。

× I become a football player in the college school team right now.

✓ I became a football player on my college team.

“Became”应使用过去式，因为句子描述的是过去的经历。“在球队中”通常使用介词“on”，因此应说“on my college team”。另外，“right now”表示现在，与过去时“became”不一致，所以应删除。

× Yeah, I think a whole life is about the challenge and to take the challenge.

✓ Yeah, I think life is about facing challenges and taking them on.

“About”后面可以接动名词，因此“to take”应改为“taking”。“Challenge”是可数名词，在泛指多个挑战时应使用复数“challenges”。同时，“a whole life”在这里不自然，表达一般事实时直接使用“life”即可。

× People should take all the opportunities they have and try to feel it and try to take it.

✓ People should take all the opportunities they have, try them, and make the most of them.

“Opportunities”是复数名词，因此不能用单数代词“it”，应使用复数代词“them”。这里三个动作都指向“opportunities”，所以代词应保持复数一致。

× They will found their ability and their yeah.

✓ They will find their abilities and discover what they are good at.

情态动词“will”后面必须接动词原形，所以“found”应改为“find”。“People”通常会发现多种能力，因此“ability”改为复数“abilities”更合适。原句最后的“their yeah”不完整，改为“discover what they are good at”后意思完整。