Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答没有直接谈童年经历，而是谈了今年十月的未来计划，因此内容偏题。应先明确回答童年时是否有机会参加新活动，再补充一个具体例子，例如参加运动、音乐课或学校社团。注意时态：童年经历使用过去时；“give a teacher training”应根据语境改为“attend a teacher-training course”或“provide teacher training”。此外，句子没有完整结束，且“expected as a great challenge”应改为“expect it to be a great challenge”。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I joined a school drama club, even though I had never acted before. At first, I felt nervous, but I gradually became more confident and learned how to work with other students.

提案: 回答观点明确，但内容太短，缺少具体原因或例子。应使用清晰的连接结构，例如“because”或“for example”来展开。语法方面，“trying different things experience new challenges”应改为“trying different things and experiencing new challenges”，“keep people stay young”应改为“keep people feeling young”或“help people stay mentally young”。同时避免重复使用“and”，并加入一个具体例子来增强内容。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because new experiences help them stay curious and mentally young. For example, someone who takes up painting or learning a language may discover a new interest and meet different people. It can also make life more exciting and help them become more adaptable.

× Yes, this October I will go to give a teacher training in Toming.

✓ Yes, this October I will go to give teacher training in Toming.

“Teacher training”通常表示培训这一活动，是不可数名词，前面一般不使用不定冠词“a”。因此，应删除“a”。

× I expected as a great challenge because I need to prepare a lot of new materials.

✓ I expect it to be a great challenge because I need to prepare a lot of new materials.

“This October”表示将来的时间，因此不能使用过去式“expected”。这里应使用现在时“expect”来表达对未来的预期。另外，“expect”后面需要使用“expect + 宾语 + to be”的结构，所以要加入“it to be”。

× I expected as a great challenge because I need to prepare a lot of new materials and also

✓ I expect it to be a great challenge because I need to prepare a lot of new materials.

“expect”后面不能直接接“as”。正确结构是“expect + 宾语 + to be + 名词或形容词”，所以应改为“expect it to be a great challenge”。原句最后的“and also”没有连接后续内容，因此在完整回答中应删除，或补充完整的并列内容。

× I expected as a great challenge because I need to prepare a lot of new materials.

✓ I expect it to be a great challenge because I will need to prepare a lot of new materials.

“This October”指将来，因此“需要准备”也发生在将来，应使用“will need”，而不是一般现在时“need”。使用“will need”可以使整句话的时间一致。

× I think trying different things experience new challenges can keep people stay young and and stay curious.

✓ I think trying different things and experiencing new challenges can keep people young and curious.

原句中的“and and”重复使用了连词。这里需要一个“and”连接两个并列的动名词短语：“trying different things”和“experiencing new challenges”。句末也只需要一个“and”连接“young”和“curious”。

× I think trying different things experience new challenges can keep people stay young and and stay curious.

✓ I think trying different things and experiencing new challenges can keep people young and curious.

“keep”后面不能直接使用“people + stay”这种结构。这里可使用“keep + 宾语 + 形容词”，即“keep people young”，表示“使人保持年轻”。同时，“experience”与前面的“trying”并列时，应改为动名词“experiencing”。

× I think trying different things experience new challenges can keep people stay young and and stay curious.

✓ I think trying different things and experiencing new challenges can keep people young and curious.

原句把多个动词和短语直接堆在一起，缺少清晰的并列结构。“trying different things”和“experiencing new challenges”应组成并列主语；“keep people young and curious”应作为完整的谓语结构。