Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra ví dụ, nhưng có nhiều lỗi dùng từ và cấu trúc khiến ý nghĩa chưa rõ. “gave me the change” nên sửa thành “gave me the chance”, còn “what I like” nên dùng thì quá khứ là “what I liked”. Cụm “the way the skirt or fly” không tự nhiên và có vẻ chưa diễn đạt rõ hoạt động; hãy nêu một hoạt động cụ thể như học trượt patin hoặc học bay. Ngoài ra, nên dùng một từ nối như “For example” và giới hạn câu trả lời ở 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I did. When I was about five or seven, my parents gave me the chance to try different activities. For example, I learned to ride a bike and took skating lessons, which I really enjoyed.

提案: Bạn đã thể hiện rõ quan điểm đồng ý, nhưng câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ: “the pupil” nên đổi thành “people” hoặc “children”, “many lead opportunity” nên là “many opportunities”, và “especially this for the children or a student” cần diễn đạt lại. Câu trả lời cũng thiếu lý do và ví dụ cụ thể để phát triển ý. Hãy mở đầu bằng “Yes, I think people should…” rồi giải thích lợi ích, chẳng hạn khám phá sở thích hoặc phát triển kỹ năng mới. Sử dụng các từ nối như “because”, “for example” và “as a result” để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I think people should try different things whenever they have the opportunity. This helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, a child who tries sports, music, and art may find an activity that they truly enjoy.

× I remember that when I was a child, maybe 5 or 7 years old, my parents all always gave me the change to do what I like.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, maybe five or seven years old, my parents always gave me the chance to do what I liked.

Because you are talking about your childhood, the verb like should be in the past tense: liked. The word all is unnecessary here, and always should be placed before the main verb gave.

× my parents all always gave me the change to do what I like

✓ my parents always gave me the chance to do what I liked

The adverb always normally comes before the main verb in this sentence. The word all is unnecessary because parents already refers to more than one person.

× Uh, for example the way the skirt or fly.

✓ For example, I had opportunities to learn how to skate or fly.

The original sentence does not have a complete grammatical structure. It needs a subject and a verb. The phrase the way the skirt is also not grammatically complete, so it has been reorganized into a complete example.

× with the pupil should have many lead opportunity to do what they want, what they like, life if they have the chance and especially this for the children or a student.

✓ Pupils should have many learning opportunities to do what they want and like, especially children and students who have the chance to try different activities.

The quantifier many must be followed by a plural countable noun, so opportunity becomes opportunities. Pupils, children, and students are plural nouns because the sentence discusses people in general.

× with the pupil should have many lead opportunity to do what they want

✓ Pupils should have many learning opportunities to do what they want.

The phrase the pupil refers to one specific pupil, but the sentence is making a general statement. Therefore, use the plural noun pupils without the definite article.

× Yes, of course with the pupil should have many lead opportunity to do what they want, what they like, life if they have the chance and especially this for the children or a student.

✓ Yes, of course. Pupils should have many learning opportunities to do what they want and like, especially if they have the chance to try different activities.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined together without a clear grammatical structure. Splitting the response into two sentences and using especially if creates a clear and logical sentence.

× especially this for the children or a student

✓ This is especially important for children and students.

The article a cannot be used before students when referring to students in general. Use the plural form students without an article. Similarly, children is already plural and does not need the article the when speaking generally.