Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，能够提供具体例子，结构基本清晰。建议将“different new things”改为更自然的“new activities”，并具体说明参加足球队带来的结果，因为“which helped me”表达不完整。另外，“took part in music and sports activities”略显重复，可以改为“attended music classes and played sports”。

例: Yes, my parents encouraged me to try new activities when I was a child. I attended music classes and played sports, especially football. For example, I joined a football team when I was eight, which helped me become more confident and learn how to work with others.

提案: 回答有明确观点和原因，但存在明显的语法和表达问题。“I agree”后面需要加完整结构，如“I agree that...”；“our strength and weaknesses”应改为“our strengths and weaknesses”；“a sport team”应改为“a sports team”。最后一句“while music class”不完整，应该说明音乐课能发现什么能力。建议使用“also”或“whereas”连接两个例子，并补充具体结果。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. This can help them discover their strengths and weaknesses. For instance, joining a sports team may show that someone is good at teamwork, while taking music classes might reveal a talent for creativity or performing.

× Yes, I agree when we are young we should try to take part in different things because it can help us find out our strength and weaknesses.

✓ Yes, I agree when we are young we should try to take part in different things because it can help us find out our strengths and weaknesses.

“strength”与“weaknesses”并列，且前面有“our”，表示多个方面，因此两个名词都应使用复数形式： “strengths and weaknesses”。建议注意并列名词的单复数形式保持一致。

× Yes, I agree when we are young we should try to take part in different things because it can help us find out our strength and weaknesses.

✓ Yes, I agree that when we are young, we should try to take part in different things because it can help us find out our strengths and weaknesses.

“agree”后面连接完整观点时，通常使用“agree that...”，而不能直接使用“agree when...”。“when we are young”是时间状语从句，前面加“that”后结构更清晰。建议记住：“agree that + 完整句子”。

× For example, joining a sport team might show we are good at teamwork while music class.

✓ For example, joining a sports team might show we are good at teamwork while taking a music class.

固定搭配通常是“a sports team”，其中“sports”作为定语使用复数形式。另外，“a music class”表示“一节音乐课”，不能直接说“music class”来表达这里的意思。建议记住常见搭配“sports team”和“a music class”。

× while music class

✓ while taking a music class

“while music class”中没有动词，因此不能构成完整的从句。使用“while taking a music class”后，“taking”是动词的现在分词形式，表示“在上音乐课时”。建议在“while”后使用完整从句，或使用“while + 动词-ing”结构。