Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容切题，也提到了具体活动和团队合作，但有明显的语法、搭配和句子连接问题。首先，“when I was a student”不如“when I was a child”准确；“Bandi sports events”建议确认项目名称，如果指的是传统运动，可以说“bandy competitions”。其次，“it cultivated by strengthens of teamwork”应改为“it strengthened my teamwork skills”。第二句中有逗号拼接两个完整句子，建议使用“Although”或“However”连接。可以补充一个具体细节，例如你在比赛中负责什么，或这项活动带来了什么结果。

例: Yes, when I was a child, I had the opportunity to take part in bandy competitions. I worked closely with my teammates and learned how to cooperate under pressure. Although the competitions were sometimes challenging, they greatly strengthened my teamwork skills.

提案: 观点明确，也给出了尝试新事物的两个好处，但词汇选择和语法错误较多。“multiple scenes”应改为“different activities”或“new things”；“Trying multiple scenes improve”应为“Trying different things improves”；“feel fair”应为“feel afraid”；“experienced and confidence”应为“more experienced and confident”。此外，“Besides”后应加逗号，并且最后一句可以用“as a result”连接。建议加入一个具体例子，例如学习新运动或参加公开演讲，以使回答更有说服力。

例: Yes, I think people should try different things whenever possible. It can make them more confident and less afraid of unfamiliar situations. For example, learning a new sport may be difficult at first, but it helps people gain experience and perform better in the future.

× Yes, when I was a student, I took part in Bandi sports events. I worked closely with my teammates to achieve our common goals during the competitions, it wasn't always fun, but it cultivated by strengthens of teamwork.

✓ Yes, when I was a student, I took part in Bandi sports events. I worked closely with my teammates to achieve our common goals during the competitions. It wasn't always fun, but it strengthened my teamwork skills.

原句中“during the competitions, it wasn't always fun”用逗号连接了两个完整句子，形成逗号拼接错误。应使用句号将它们分开。另外，“cultivated by strengthens of teamwork”结构不完整且表达不自然。可以改为“strengthened my teamwork skills”，意思是“增强了我的团队合作能力”。

× Yes, when I was a student, I took part in Bandi sports events. I worked closely with my teammates to achieve our common goals during the competitions, it wasn't always fun, but it cultivated by strengthens of teamwork.

✓ Yes, when I was a student, I took part in Bandi sports events. I worked closely with my teammates to achieve our common goals during the competitions. It wasn't always fun, but it strengthened my teamwork skills.

这段经历发生在过去，所以动词应使用过去式。“strengthens”是现在时形式，应该改为过去式“strengthened”。注意，规则动词的过去式通常在词尾加“-ed”。

× Trying multiple scenes improve our courage, so we will not feel fair when we face strange things.

✓ Trying multiple scenes improves our courage, so we will not feel fair when we face strange things.

“Trying multiple scenes”是动名词短语，在句中作单数主语，因此后面的动词要用第三人称单数形式。“improve”应改为“improves”。

× Trying multiple scenes improve our courage, so we will not feel fair when we face strange things.

✓ Trying multiple scenes improves our courage, so we will not feel afraid when we face strange things.

“fair”表示“公平的”，不能表达面对陌生事物时的害怕情绪。这里应使用形容词“afraid”，所以“feel fair”应改为“feel afraid”。

× Besides it can also make us more experienced and confidence.

✓ Besides, it can also make us more experienced and confident.

“experienced”和“confident”都应使用形容词，保持并列结构一致。“confidence”是名词，不能和形容词“experienced”并列。应将其改为形容词“confident”。