Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is well organized and specific: you give a direct answer, mention several activities, and provide a clear example. However, use plural nouns and more natural collocations: say “new activities,” “had the chance,” and “a weekend art class.” You could also improve the final sentence by explaining how the activity influenced you.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had the chance to try several new activities at school and in local clubs, including football and painting. For instance, my parents signed me up for a weekend art class when I was eight, and I attended it every Saturday for a year. As a result, I learned the basics of drawing and developed a lasting interest in art.

提案: You give a clear opinion and support it with a personal example, which makes the answer effective. Improve the grammar and naturalness of the final sentence: use “it is a good idea to try new things,” not “it could to try things.” Also, “creating work like photos” is unclear; say “taking photographs” or “creative work such as photography.” Add a linking phrase such as “However” to present your balanced view more smoothly.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them develop new skills and discover their interests. For example, I tried photography and coding, but after exploring both, I realized that I preferred creative work, particularly taking photographs. However, people do not need to try everything at once; they should experiment gradually and focus on the activities they find most enjoyable.

× As a child I often had a chance to try new activity at school and in local clubs, like football and painting.

✓ As a child, I often had a chance to try new activities at school and in local clubs, like football and painting.

The noun activity is used in a general sense and refers to more than one type of activity, so it should be plural: activities. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase As a child improves punctuation and readability.

× For example, my parents signed me up for weekend art class when I was 8 and I went every Saturday for a year.

✓ For example, my parents signed me up for a weekend art class when I was 8, and I went every Saturday for a year.

A singular countable noun such as class normally requires an article. Use a because this is one nonspecific weekend art class. A comma before and also helps separate the two independent clauses.

× So it could to try things but you don't need to do everything at once.

✓ So it could be helpful to try different things, but you don't need to do everything at once.

The modal verb could must be followed by the base form of a verb, not to plus a verb. The original phrase could to try is therefore incorrect. A natural correction is could be helpful to try. Remember this pattern: modal verb + base verb, such as could try, should explore, or might help.