Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repeating “I was very happy” and use more natural expressions such as “a dance and singing competition” and “build my confidence.” Use a clear linking word such as “As a result” to connect the experience with its benefit. Keep the answer to two or three well-organized sentences.

例: Yes. When I was a child, I took part in a dance and singing competition at school. It was a valuable experience because I learned new skills and, as a result, became more confident performing in front of other people.

提案: Give a complete and organized answer because the response ends unfinished. State your opinion first, then provide a reason and a specific example. Avoid repetition of “learn new skills” and remove unclear phrases such as “like they” and “because they give more.” Use accurate linking words, for example “because,” “Moreover,” or “For instance,” and explain how trying new activities benefits people.

例: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For instance, someone who tries swimming, music, or team sports may become more confident and learn how to work with others. However, they should choose activities that genuinely interest them rather than trying everything at once.

× Yes, when I was a child I took part in both a dancing and singing competition and I was very happy because I learned new skills and I gained my confidence so I am very happy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I took part in both dancing and singing competitions. I was very happy because I learned new skills and gained confidence.

The phrase both ... and ... joins two activities, so the plural noun competitions is needed. Also, dancing and singing are used as activities here, so they do not need the article a.

× Yes, when I was a child I took part in both a dancing and singing competition and I was very happy because I learned new skills and I gained my confidence so I am very happy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I took part in both dancing and singing competitions. I was very happy because I learned new skills and gained confidence.

The answer describes experiences during childhood, so the past tense should be used consistently. Change am to was to match the past-time context.

× Yes, when I was a child I took part in both a dancing and singing competition and I was very happy because I learned new skills and I gained my confidence so I am very happy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I took part in both dancing and singing competitions. I was very happy because I learned new skills and gained confidence.

The article a cannot be used before two coordinated activities in this sentence. Use dancing and singing competitions without a before the two activity names, and use the uncountable expression gained confidence rather than gained my confidence.

× Yes, I think people should try many different things like they They learn new skills like dancing, singing or swimming because they give more they gain their confidence and they learn new skills and

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn new skills, such as dancing, singing, or swimming, and gain confidence.

The pronoun they is repeated and is used incorrectly after like. The sentence needs a clear subject and verb: they can learn. In addition, people gain confidence, not their confidence, when speaking generally.

× Yes, I think people should try many different things like they They learn new skills like dancing, singing or swimming because they give more they gain their confidence and they learn new skills and

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn new skills, such as dancing, singing, or swimming, and gain confidence.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use because to give the reason for trying different activities, and use and to connect the two benefits: learn new skills and gain confidence.

× Yes, I think people should try many different things like they They learn new skills like dancing, singing or swimming because they give more they gain their confidence and they learn new skills and

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn new skills, such as dancing, singing, or swimming, and gain confidence.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words, unclear clause connections, and a final unfinished conjunction. A complete structure is subject plus modal verb plus main verb: people should try. The reason can then be expressed with because, followed by a complete clause.