Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có cố gắng nêu ví dụ, nhưng cấu trúc câu chưa rõ và có nhiều lỗi dùng từ, lặp từ và phát âm/diễn đạt như “as a choice”, “ordinary music”, “sports cloth” và “I saw Jones”. Em nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu 1–2 hoạt động cụ thể cùng lý do hoặc cảm nhận. Hãy dùng quá khứ nhất quán, chẳng hạn “At school, I had the opportunity to try...” và tránh đưa quá nhiều ý không liên quan.

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities at school. I took part in music and sports clubs, where I tried singing and running. I especially enjoyed singing because it helped me become more confident.

提案: Em đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm và đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể, nhưng cần sửa cấu trúc “because it has some new skills and find” thành “because they can learn new skills and find out what they enjoy”. Hãy dùng chủ ngữ nhất quán (“people/they”), chia động từ chính xác và thêm từ nối như “For example” hoặc “As a result”. Vì câu hỏi dùng “Should”, nên câu mở đầu nên thể hiện rõ quan điểm: “Yes, I think people should...”.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities. This allows them to learn new skills and discover what they genuinely enjoy. For example, I have tried cooking and photography, and both hobbies have helped me become more creative.

× Well just I had some choice to try new activities as a choice my school ordinary music music and sports cloth so I tried singing and running and I saw Jones.

✓ Well, I had some opportunities to try new activities at school, such as music and sports clubs, so I tried singing and running and saw Jones.

The original sentence contains several fragments and incorrectly connected ideas. Use a clear sentence structure with a subject, verb, and logical connectors. The phrase such as introduces examples of activities.

× sports cloth

✓ sports clubs

The noun should be clubs because the speaker is referring to organized activities or groups at school. Also, clubs is the correct plural noun in this context.

× my school ordinary music music and sports cloth

✓ at school, such as music and sports clubs

Use the preposition at to refer to the place where the activities took place. The original phrase is also missing a clear connection between school and the activities.

× Well, I think people try different things because it has some new skills and find what they enjoy.

✓ Well, I think people should try different things because they can develop new skills and find what they enjoy.

The question asks whether people should try different things, so should is needed to express advice or recommendation. Can is used to express the possible benefits of trying different activities.

× because it has some new skills

✓ because they can develop new skills

The pronoun it does not correctly refer to people. Since people is plural, use they. Also, people develop skills; activities do not have skills.

× because it has some new skills and find what they enjoy

✓ because they can develop new skills and find what they enjoy

The original clause has an incorrect subject and an unclear verb structure. Use they as the subject for both coordinated verbs: can develop and find. The modal can applies to both verbs.