Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也列举了具体活动，但有明显语法和搭配问题。应将过去时“take”改为“took”，将“variety activities”改为“a variety of activities”，并使用更自然的表达，如“participate in hosting events”。此外，可以补充一个具体活动及其结果，使答案更完整；列举多个活动时可用“such as”或“including”避免重复使用“or”。

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. I took part in a variety of activities, such as dancing, singing, and hosting school events. I especially enjoyed hosting because it helped me become more confident when speaking in front of other people.

提案: 观点明确，也提供了个人例子，但答案没有完成，影响了表达的连贯性和有效性。应将“no talent on cooking”改为“not talented at cooking”或“wasn’t good at cooking”，并保持时态一致：过去经历使用“thought”和“found”。最后应补充结果，例如学会了一道菜、变得更有信心，或认识到尝试新事物的价值。注意“as for me”不必与“For example”同时使用。

例: Yes, I think people should try different things when they have the opportunity. For example, I used to think I wasn’t good at cooking, but I learned to cook during last summer vacation. As a result, I became more confident and discovered that trying something new can be rewarding.

× Well, I still remember when I was a child, I always take part in variety activities such as dancing or singing or some hosting activities.

✓ Well, I still remember that when I was a child, I always took part in a variety of activities, such as dancing, singing, or hosting activities.

“When I was a child”表示过去时间，因此“take”应使用过去式“took”。描述过去经常发生的事情时，要保持过去时态一致。

× Well, I still remember when I was a child, I always take part in variety activities such as dancing or singing or some hosting activities.

✓ Well, I still remember that when I was a child, I always took part in a variety of activities, such as dancing, singing, or hosting activities.

固定表达是“a variety of activities”，其中“variety”前需要不定冠词“a”。表示“各种各样的活动”时，不能直接说“variety activities”。

× Well, I still remember when I was a child, I always take part in variety activities such as dancing or singing or some hosting activities.

✓ Well, I still remember that when I was a child, I always took part in a variety of activities, such as dancing, singing, or hosting activities.

“a variety of”是固定搭配，表示“各种各样的”。“variety”后面需要介词“of”来连接“activities”。

× Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, As for me, at first I think I am no talent on cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and I find.

✓ Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, as for me, at first I thought I had no talent for cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and found that I enjoyed it.

“Last summer vacation”和“learned”都表示过去时间，因此“think”和“find”也应改为过去式“thought”和“found”。在叙述过去经历时，应保持主要动词的时态一致。

× Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, As for me, at first I think I am no talent on cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and I find.

✓ Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, as for me, at first I thought I had no talent for cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and found that I enjoyed it.

“talent”是名词，不能直接放在“I am”后面表示“有天赋”。应使用“I had no talent for cooking”，或使用形容词结构“I wasn’t talented at cooking”。

× Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, As for me, at first I think I am no talent on cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and I find.

✓ Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, as for me, at first I thought I had no talent for cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and found that I enjoyed it.

表达“在某方面没有天赋”时，通常使用“have no talent for something”，所以“on cooking”应改为“for cooking”。

× Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, As for me, at first I think I am no talent on cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and I find.

✓ Well, I think people should try some new things if they can. For example, as for me, at first I thought I had no talent for cooking, but last summer vacation I learned to cook and found that I enjoyed it.

句末“I find”后面缺少完整的宾语或从句，意思没有表达完整。可以改为“found that I enjoyed it”，补充完整的宾语从句，使句子结构完整。