Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，也给出了原因和具体活动，但存在语法、搭配和时态问题。应避免重复使用“my parents”，并将“focus my study”改为“focus on my studies”，“They will worry”改为过去时“They worried”，“I really went out”应改为“I rarely went out”，“spend”应改为过去时“spent”。此外，使用“so”连接时不要出现“because... So...”的重复结构。建议用“Unfortunately”或“However”增加自然衔接，并补充一个具体例子，使答案更生动。

例: No, unfortunately, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents preferred me to stay at home and focus on my studies because they were worried about my safety. As a result, I rarely joined clubs or attended classes, and I usually spent my free time reading or doing homework.

提案: 观点明确，但“as many...as they can”被错误改成了“as many...as I can”，且“I am a very outstanding girl”与问题关系不大，也显得不够自然。应直接说明尝试新事物的好处，例如培养技能、发现兴趣或增强适应能力。“it improve”应改为“it improves”，“makes my life wonderful so”表达不自然。建议使用“First of all”或“Besides”连接两个理由，并加入具体例子；答案控制在3—4句即可。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. First of all, new experiences can help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, trying a new sport or joining a club can improve their confidence and help them meet different people.

× No, when I was a child my parents didn't like me to go out because my parents prefer me to stay at home and focus my study.

✓ No, when I was a child, my parents didn't like me to go out because my parents preferred me to stay at home and focus on my studies.

“When I was a child”表示过去的时间，因此后面的“prefer”也应使用一般过去时“preferred”。此外，“focus”通常与介词“on”搭配，表示“专注于”；“study”在这里应使用复数“studies”，表示学习或学业。

× No, when I was a child my parents didn't like me to go out because my parents prefer me to stay at home and focus my study.

✓ No, when I was a child, my parents didn't like me to go out because my parents preferred me to stay at home and focus on my studies.

固定搭配是“focus on something”，不能说“focus something”。因此应改为“focus on my studies”。

× No, when I was a child my parents didn't like me to go out because my parents prefer me to stay at home and focus my study.

✓ No, when I was a child, my parents didn't like me to go out because my parents preferred me to stay at home and focus on my studies.

这里的“studies”表示一个人的学习或学业，通常使用复数形式。建议记住短语“focus on one's studies”。

× They will worry about my safety.

✓ They would worry about my safety.

整段是在描述童年时期的情况。主句使用过去时背景时，表示过去将来或过去可能发生的事情，应使用“would”，而不是“will”。

× So I really went out to join clubs or classes and mostly spend my free time reading or doing homework.

✓ So I really went out to join clubs or classes and mostly spent my free time reading or doing homework.

句子描述的是童年时期的过去经历，因此“spend”应改为一般过去时“spent”，与前面的“went”保持时态一致。

× Yes, I am a very outstanding girl, so I like to try so many different things as I can.

✓ Yes, I am a very outstanding girl, so I like to try as many different things as I can.

表达“尽可能多的……”时，应使用固定结构“as many + 可数名词复数 + as I can”。因此“so many ... as I can”应改为“as many ... as I can”。

× I think that it makes my life wonderful so and it improve my abilities.

✓ I think that it makes my life wonderful and improves my abilities.

“so and”不能同时连接这两个分句。这里需要使用并列连词“and”表示“并且”，因此应删除多余的“so”。

× I think that it makes my life wonderful so and it improve my abilities.

✓ I think that it makes my life wonderful and improves my abilities.

主语“it”是第三人称单数，因此一般现在时的动词“improve”需要加“-s”，改为“improves”。