Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use the correct article: “an opportunity,” not “a opportunity.” You can make the answer more effective by briefly explaining when or where you played these sports. Also, “football and cricket” is more natural than “football and also cricket” in this context.

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I played football and cricket at school, which helped me become more active and make new friends.

提案: State your opinion clearly and use a logical reason. Avoid the repeated and unclear phrase “they knew.” Use “people should try” or “they should try,” and explain that trying different activities helps people discover their interests, develop skills, or gain confidence. Linking words such as “because” and “for example” can make the answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries different sports, hobbies, or courses may find an activity they really enjoy.

× Yes, I had a opportunity when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had an opportunity when I was a child.

Use an before a word that begins with a vowel sound. Opportunity begins with a vowel sound, so an opportunity is correct.

× Yes, Will should try as many things as they can because they knew when they knew things, they knew much better a lot.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn more from each experience.

Will is a person’s name and does not match the general subject people in the question. Use people as the subject and they as its matching pronoun. When giving a general opinion, avoid changing from people to an unrelated name.

× Yes, Will should try as many things as they can because they knew when they knew things, they knew much better a lot.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn more from each experience.

The question asks about what people should do generally, so use the present tense. Replace knew with can learn to express a general idea. The past-tense form knew is not suitable here.

× Yes, Will should try as many things as they can because they knew when they knew things, they knew much better a lot.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn more from each experience.

The original sentence repeats knew and uses the unnatural phrase knew much better a lot. A clear sentence structure is subject + should + verb, followed by a because-clause explaining the reason. The phrase learn more from each experience expresses the intended meaning clearly.