Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，也提供了活动和影响，但存在明显的语法、搭配和表达问题。应使用过去时，例如将“have”改为“had”，并避免重复“dance”。“dance in the public”应改为“dance in public”，“I played it well”不适合描述跳舞，建议使用“I was quite good at it”。此外，“Thank you”在回答中没有必要。可以按照“直接回答+具体经历+结果”的结构，并加入连接词使内容更连贯。

例: Yes, I had the opportunity to learn dancing when I was a child. I sometimes performed in public at school events, and I was quite good at it. As a result, dancing helped me become more confident and less nervous in front of other people.

提案: 回答表达了明确观点，也给出了原因，但第二句中的“flurry our mind”不是正确搭配，建议改为“broaden our minds”或“help us see things from different perspectives”。“different new opinions”表达重复且不自然，可以改为“new ideas”。建议进一步补充一个具体例子或结果，例如尝试新运动、学习新技能能够发现兴趣并增强适应能力。同时使用“for example”和“as a result”等连接词提升逻辑性。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because each experience can give them new ideas and broaden their minds. For example, trying a new sport or learning a musical instrument may help them discover a hidden interest. It can also make them more adaptable and confident.

× Yes, when I was a child, I have a an opportunity to dance, dance in the public. I played it well. It improved my confidence. Thank you.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had an opportunity to dance in public. I played it well. It improved my confidence. Thank you.

“When I was a child”表示过去的时间，因此应该使用一般过去时“had”，而不能使用现在完成时形式“have”。描述过去发生的经历时，主句中的动词通常也要使用过去时。

× Yes, when I was a child, I have a an opportunity to dance, dance in the public. I played it well. It improved my confidence. Thank you.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had an opportunity to dance in public. I played it well. It improved my confidence. Thank you.

“opportunity”以元音音素开头，所以前面应使用“an”，不能同时使用“a”和“an”。应说“an opportunity”。

× Yes, when I was a child, I have a an opportunity to dance, dance in the public. I played it well. It improved my confidence. Thank you.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had an opportunity to dance in public. I played it well. It improved my confidence. Thank you.

表示“在公共场合”时，固定搭配是“in public”，通常不使用定冠词“the”。“in the public”在这里不自然。

× This experience and the new opinions can flurry our mind.

✓ These experiences and the new opinions can flurry our minds.

前文提到的是多种经历和观点，因此“experience”应改为复数“experiences”，并使用复数指示词“These”。“our”后面的名词也应与前面的多种内容保持一致，所以“mind”应改为“minds”。