Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense: use “I didn’t have many opportunities” instead of “I don’t have opportunity.” Use the plural forms “activities” and “opportunities,” and avoid the unnecessary filler “uh” and the incomplete phrase “as, when.” Add one specific reason or example to develop your answer naturally.

例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child because my parents were quite busy. I mostly stayed at home and played with my friends in the neighborhood. However, I did occasionally take part in school sports.

提案: State your opinion clearly and use the correct structure: “people should try as many different things as they can.” Explain the idea with a logical linking word such as “because” or “as a result.” Correct “you never try” to “you never know what you might enjoy,” and use the plural form “opportunities” without “the.” Avoid repeating very short sentences and give one specific example.

例: Yes, definitely. I think people should try as many different things as they can because they may discover new interests or talents. For example, someone who tries photography or a new sport might find a hobby they really enjoy. Trying different activities can also help people become more confident.

× No, I don't have opportunity to take part in new activity as, uh, when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have an opportunity to take part in new activities when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a finished period in the past, so the past tense didn't have is required instead of the present tense don't have.

× No, I don't have opportunity to take part in new activity as, uh, when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have an opportunity to take part in new activities when I was a child.

Opportunity and activity are countable nouns. Because the statement refers to opportunities and activities in general, use the plural forms opportunities and activities.

× No, I don't have opportunity to take part in new activity as, uh, when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have an opportunity to take part in new activities when I was a child.

A singular countable noun needs an article. Use an before opportunity because opportunity begins with a vowel sound.

× No, I don't have opportunity to take part in new activity as, uh, when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have an opportunity to take part in new activities when I was a child.

As and when are unnecessarily combined in this sentence. When is the appropriate conjunction for introducing the time period in which the situation occurred.

× Yes, I think people try as many different things as they can't because you never try.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because you never know what you might discover unless you try.

The question uses should, so the answer should express the same idea with should try. In the comparison structure as many ... as, use the affirmative modal can, not can't.

× Yes, I think people try as many different things as they can't because you never try.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because you never know what you might discover unless you try.

Can means that people are able to try many things. Can't means that they are unable to do so and changes the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think people try as many different things as they can't because you never try. You never know.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because you never know what you might discover unless you try.

Because introduces a dependent clause, so because you never try cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Combine the idea with an independent clause and use unless you try to express the intended condition clearly.

× You have the too many opportunity.

✓ You have too many opportunities.

The quantifier too many must be followed by a plural countable noun. Therefore, opportunity must be changed to opportunities.

× You have the too many opportunity.

✓ You have too many opportunities.

The definite article the is not used before too many when making a general statement about an excessive number of opportunities.