Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınız suala tam və aydın şəkildə cavab vermir. “There is a lack of opportunities” fikrini daha düzgün qrammatika ilə ifadə edin və uşaqlıqda özünüzün hansı fəaliyyətlə məşğul olduğunuzu qeyd edin. “There are just kindergarten” və “as a use paintings” ifadələri yanlışdır; məsələn, “There were few opportunities, although I sometimes took art classes” deyə bilərsiniz. Fikirləri birləşdirmək üçün “however” və “for example” kimi bağlayıcılardan istifadə edin. Həmçinin “strong countries” əvəzinə “more developed countries” işlədin və cavabı yarımçıq saxlamayın.

例: There were not many opportunities for children in my area when I was young. However, I sometimes took art classes at kindergarten, where I learned how to draw and paint. In more developed countries, children may have access to a wider range of activities, such as sports clubs and music lessons.

提案: Cavabınızın əsas fikri aydındır və suala birbaşa cavab verirsiniz, lakin bəzi ifadələr təbii və qrammatik deyil. “Different things gain different experiences to people” əvəzinə “trying different activities gives people valuable experience” deyin. “If we live, if we have just life” hissəsi təkrarlıdır və fikri zəiflədir; bunu “Since we only have one life” ilə əvəz edin. “Try everything” çox ümumidir, ona görə də konkret nümunə əlavə edin və cavabı “for example” və “as a result” kimi bağlayıcılarla daha məntiqli qurun.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because each new experience can teach them something valuable. For example, learning a language may improve communication skills, while playing a sport can teach discipline and teamwork. Since we only have one life, trying different things can help us discover our interests and develop as individuals.

× There are just kindergarten for themselves.

✓ There are only kindergartens for children.

Kindergarten is a countable noun here, so it must be plural after there are. Also, kindergartens are intended for children, so for children is clearer than for themselves.

× There are just kindergarten for themselves.

✓ There are only kindergartens for children.

The structure there are is followed by a plural noun. The corrected sentence uses there are + kindergartens correctly.

× Actually in our country there is a lack of opportunities particularly for children there are just kindergarten for themselves and sometimes as a use paintings.

✓ Actually, in our country, there is a lack of opportunities, particularly for children. There are only kindergartens for children, and sometimes they use paintings.

The original sentence contains several independent ideas joined without suitable punctuation or structure. Dividing it into two sentences makes the meaning clearer. The phrase sometimes as a use paintings is also grammatically incomplete; sometimes they use paintings has a complete subject and verb.

× In the strong countries the opportunity is more than Azerbaijan.

✓ In developed countries, there are more opportunities than in Azerbaijan.

Strong countries is not the appropriate adjective phrase for countries with better educational or activity opportunities. Developed countries is more natural and precise. Opportunities must also be plural because the speaker is discussing several chances or activities.

× In the strong countries the opportunity is more than Azerbaijan.

✓ In developed countries, there are more opportunities than in Azerbaijan.

The sentence needs to express the existence of opportunities, so the correct structure is there are + plural noun: there are more opportunities.

× The opportunity is more than Azerbaijan compared to.

✓ There are more opportunities in developed countries than in Azerbaijan.

The original sentence compares an opportunity with Azerbaijan, which is not a logical comparison. The comparison should be between the number of opportunities in developed countries and the number of opportunities in Azerbaijan. The preposition in is needed before both places.

× The opportunity is more than Azerbaijan compared to.

✓ There are more opportunities in developed countries than in Azerbaijan.

For a comparison involving countable plural nouns, use more + plural noun + than. The correct comparative structure is more opportunities than in Azerbaijan.

× The opportunity is more than Azerbaijan compared to.

✓ There are more opportunities in developed countries than in Azerbaijan.

Use in before the names of places when describing where opportunities exist. The phrase compared to at the end is unnecessary because than already introduces the comparison.

× From my perspective it is important to try as many different things as people can do because different things gain different experiences to people and if we live, if we have just life, so we should try everything and we should have experience about everything.

✓ From my perspective, it is important to try as many different things as possible because different activities give people different experiences. Since we only live once, we should try as many things as possible and gain experience in different areas.

The original sentence is too long and contains several incomplete or incorrectly connected clauses. Since we only live once is a complete and natural expression, and the ideas are clearer when they are separated into logically connected sentences.

× We should have experience about everything.

✓ We should gain experience in different areas.

The natural preposition after experience when referring to subjects or fields is in, not about. Gain experience in different areas is also a more natural expression in this context.

× It is important to try as many different things as people can do.

✓ It is important to try as many different things as they can.

The pronoun they refers to people and avoids repeating the noun. The phrase as they can is grammatically complete and means as many as people are able to try.

× Because different things gain different experiences to people.

✓ Because different activities give people different experiences.

The original clause uses gain with an incorrect structure. Give people different experiences has the correct subject-verb-object pattern and clearly expresses the intended meaning.