Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly by saying what opportunity you had. Improve grammar and natural phrasing: use “gave me an opportunity,” “to become a basketball player,” and “I was bored” or “I didn’t enjoy it,” rather than “I feel kind of boring.” Use a linking word such as “however” to contrast basketball with football. Also, avoid saying “I became a footballer” unless you actually pursued it as a profession; “I started playing football instead” is more accurate.

例: Yes. When I was a child, my father gave me the opportunity to join a basketball team. However, I didn’t really enjoy basketball because I preferred football. Therefore, I started playing football instead, and I found it much more exciting.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, I think people should try different activities.” Explain the reason using natural grammar: “Trying new things helps people discover their interests and become more confident.” Replace “live in yourselves” with a clear expression such as “being true to yourself,” and avoid the repeated words “made made.” Add one specific example to make the answer more effective and coherent.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. Trying new things can help them discover their interests and build confidence. For example, someone might try a sport, a musical instrument, or volunteering before deciding what they truly enjoy. However, they should choose activities that suit their interests rather than doing everything simply because other people recommend it.

× Jess my father gives me a opportunity to become a athlete basketball but I feel kind of boring because I didn't like basketball meanwhile I really like football so I became a footballer.

✓ Jess, my father gave me an opportunity to become a basketball athlete, but I felt kind of bored because I didn't like basketball. Meanwhile, I really liked football, so I became a footballer.

Use an before opportunity and athlete because both words begin with vowel sounds. The article a is used before singular countable nouns, but the form changes to an before a vowel sound.

× Jess my father gives me a opportunity to become a athlete basketball but I feel kind of boring because I didn't like basketball meanwhile I really like football so I became a footballer.

✓ Jess, my father gave me an opportunity to become a basketball athlete, but I felt kind of bored because I didn't like basketball. Meanwhile, I really liked football, so I became a footballer.

The student is describing childhood experiences and past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense: gives becomes gave, feel becomes felt, and like becomes liked.

× Jess my father gives me a opportunity to become a athlete basketball but I feel kind of boring because I didn't like basketball meanwhile I really like football so I became a footballer.

✓ Jess, my father gave me an opportunity to become a basketball athlete, but I felt kind of bored because I didn't like basketball. Meanwhile, I really liked football, so I became a footballer.

Bored describes a person's feeling, while boring describes something that causes the feeling. Because the speaker describes his own feeling, bored is the appropriate adjective.

× Jess my father gives me a opportunity to become a athlete basketball but I feel kind of boring because I didn't like basketball meanwhile I really like football so I became a footballer.

✓ Jess, my father gave me an opportunity to become a basketball athlete, but I felt kind of bored because I didn't like basketball. Meanwhile, I really liked football, so I became a footballer.

Meanwhile is normally used as a sentence adverb and should be separated from the surrounding sentence with punctuation. Separating the ideas into two sentences makes the contrast clearer and avoids joining clauses incorrectly.

× Jess my father gives me a opportunity to become a athlete basketball but I feel kind of boring because I didn't like basketball meanwhile I really like football so I became a footballer.

✓ Jess, my father gave me an opportunity to become a basketball athlete, but I felt kind of bored because I didn't like basketball. Meanwhile, I really liked football, so I became a footballer.

The phrase a athlete basketball has an incorrect structure. In English, the noun phrase should be a basketball athlete. The long run-on sentence also needs punctuation to separate the connected ideas.

× Just I think people should try anything they want and they can because live in yourselves is one of the most decisions I've ever made made and this is built me to become a strong man today.

✓ I just think people should try anything they want and can because living for yourself is one of the most important decisions I have ever made, and this has built me into a strong man today.

The adverb just normally comes after the subject and before the main verb in this sentence: I just think. Placing it before the subject is unnatural in this context.

× Just I think people should try anything they want and they can because live in yourselves is one of the most decisions I've ever made made and this is built me to become a strong man today.

✓ I just think people should try anything they want and can because living for yourself is one of the most important decisions I have ever made, and this has built me into a strong man today.

The verb live is being used as the subject of the clause, so it must take the -ing form: living. A gerund, such as living, can function as a noun or sentence subject.

× Just I think people should try anything they want and they can because live in yourselves is one of the most decisions I've ever made made and this is built me to become a strong man today.

✓ I just think people should try anything they want and can because living for yourself is one of the most important decisions I have ever made, and this has built me into a strong man today.

The structure one of the most requires a superlative adjective followed by a plural noun. Most decisions is incomplete here, so an adjective such as important should be added: one of the most important decisions.

× Just I think people should try anything they want and they can because live in yourselves is one of the most decisions I've ever made made and this is built me to become a strong man today.

✓ I just think people should try anything they want and can because living for yourself is one of the most important decisions I have ever made, and this has built me into a strong man today.

This has built me is an active construction in which this is the subject and me is the object. The original form this is built me incorrectly combines passive is built with a direct object. Use has built me or has made me instead.

× Just I think people should try anything they want and they can because live in yourselves is one of the most decisions I've ever made made and this is built me to become a strong man today.

✓ I just think people should try anything they want and can because living for yourself is one of the most important decisions I have ever made, and this has built me into a strong man today.

After have in the present perfect, the past participle is required. Made is the correct past participle of make, but it was repeated unnecessarily. The correct form is I have ever made.