Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本涉及了问题，但语法错误较多，且内容不够清晰。首先，应使用过去时描述童年经历，例如将“there is”改为“there were”，将“take part”改为“took part”。其次，“take part in once”表达不完整，应说明参加过什么活动以及参加的次数。最后，“jumping competitivity”不是自然表达，可以说“a jumping competition”或更具体的“a long-jump competition”。建议按照“直接回答+活动细节+个人感受”的结构组织答案，并使用“when”和“although”等连接词。

例: Yes, although there were not many activities in my village, I did have one opportunity to try something new. When I was in primary school, I took part in a long-jump competition. I was a little nervous because it was my first time competing, but I really enjoyed the experience.

提案: 回答立场明确，也给出了原因，但部分表达不符合英语习惯，且词汇重复较多。“try different things as they can”应改为“try as many different things as they can”；“different things will tell you different experience”表达不自然，可以说“trying different activities can give people valuable experiences”。建议使用“because”和“For example”展开一个具体好处，如发现兴趣、培养技能或增强自信，同时避免反复使用“different things”。

例: Yes, definitely. People should try as many different things as they can because this helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries a new sport may become more confident and even find a hobby they really enjoy.

× Actually there is less activity in my village.

✓ Actually, there were fewer activities in my village.

描述童年时期的情况，应使用过去时。There be句型中，be动词要与后面的名词保持一致；activities是复数，因此使用were。

× Actually there is less activity in my village.

✓ Actually, there were fewer activities in my village.

Activity是可数名词。这里表示村里有多种活动，所以应使用复数activities。修饰可数名词复数时，应使用fewer，而不是less。

× Actually there is less activity in my village. And I only take part in once.

✓ Actually, there were fewer activities in my village, and I only took part in one activity once.

问题询问的是童年时期的经历，因此应使用过去时。is应改为were，take应改为took。take part in后面还需要接活动名称或代词，因此补充了one activity。

× People should try different things as they can because different things will tell you different experience and other benefits from the things.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because different activities can give them different experiences and other benefits.

固定结构是as many＋可数名词复数＋as someone can，表示“尽可能多的……”。因此不能说different things as they can，应改为as many different things as they can。

× People should try different things as they can because different things will tell you different experience and other benefits from the things.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because different activities can give them different experiences and other benefits.

这里表示尝试不同活动后获得多种不同的经历，因此experience应使用复数experiences。不同的活动也应与前文的意思保持一致，使用activities更清楚。

× People should try different things as they can because different things will tell you different experience and other benefits from the things.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because different activities can give them different experiences and other benefits.

原句中的different things will tell you different experience结构和搭配不自然；活动不能直接“告诉”某人经历。可以使用can give someone experiences and benefits，句子结构更完整、自然。