Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит прямой ответ и попытку объяснить причину, но есть несколько неестественных выражений и грамматических ошибок. Фраза “as they were a child” неверна: лучше сказать “because they wanted to broaden my horizons” или “because they enjoyed trying new things when they were children”. Слово “sections” не подходит в данном контексте; используйте “activities”, “classes” или конкретные примеры, например “art classes and swimming lessons”. Объедините идеи с помощью связки “so” и добавьте один конкретный пример. Ответ можно сделать более естественным и сократить до 2–3 предложений.

例: Yes, I did. My parents wanted to broaden my horizons, so they encouraged me to try different activities, such as swimming and painting. I really enjoyed discovering new interests.

提案: Основная идея ясна, но необходимо исправить грамматику в конструкции “you don't know in advance would you like something or not”: правильно — “you don't know in advance whether you will like something or not”. Выражение “the zo of your life” непонятно и, вероятно, является оговоркой или ошибкой; замените его на “a lifelong passion”, “a turning point in your life” или “something you truly love”. Используйте более точную связку, например “because” или “For example”, и приведите конкретный результат попытки нового занятия. Не нужно говорить “as many different things as they can”, если это звучит слишком категорично; можно уточнить “within reason” или “when possible”.

例: Yes, I think people should try different things whenever possible because they may discover a new passion. For example, someone might take a photography course just for fun and eventually turn it into a lifelong hobby or even a career.

× Yes, I had because my parents always wanted to widen my horizons as they were a child.

✓ Yes, I did because my parents always wanted to widen my horizons when I was a child.

In a short answer to a past-tense question beginning with Did you have..., use the past auxiliary did, not had. The main verb is omitted because it is understood from the question: Yes, I did have opportunities.

× Yes, I had because my parents always wanted to widen my horizons as they were a child.

✓ Yes, I did because my parents always wanted to widen my horizons when they were children.

The plural subject they must be followed by the plural noun children, not the singular noun child. However, in this context, when I was a child is more logical because the student was a child.

× Yes, I had because my parents always wanted to widen my horizons as they were a child.

✓ Yes, I did because my parents always wanted to widen my horizons when I was a child.

The pronoun they refers to my parents, but the intended meaning is that the student was a child. Use I, followed by was, to refer to the student. A useful improvement is to check which person each pronoun refers to before choosing it.

× Yes, I think people should because you do not know in advance would you like something or not and maybe something that you try could be the zo of your life.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things because you do not know in advance whether you would like something or not, and maybe something that you try could be the zo of your life.

After you do not know, the following clause is an indirect question, so it needs statement word order: whether you would like something, not would you like something. In indirect questions, the subject comes before the verb. Use whether or if when presenting two possible alternatives.