Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接回应了问题，并给出了具体活动，但有一些明显的语法和搭配错误。应将“signed me a lot of outdoor sports”改为“signed me up for several outdoor sports”，“footballs”改为“football”，并将过去时“spend”改为“spent”。此外，第二句可以说明这些活动带来的具体影响，使答案更自然、更有内容。

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities after school. For example, my parents signed me up for football and skiing lessons, so I spent quite a lot of time doing outdoor sports. These activities helped me become more energetic and confident.

提案: 观点明确，但句子过长，缺少清晰的停顿和连接，导致逻辑不够自然。“for me”应改为“in my opinion”，“outdoor experience”应改为复数或更自然的表达，如“outdoor activities”，“boost my bodies”应改为“improve my physical health”，“make me more resilient”前应使用并列结构。最后的“that could be benefit or a waste of life”意思不清，建议删除或改为具体结果，并用“because”或“For example”连接理由和例子。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. In my opinion, new experiences can improve both physical health and mental resilience. For example, doing outdoor sports taught me how to deal with challenges and become more confident.

× I did have some opportunities to take part in new activities after school because my parents signed me a lot of outdoor sports like footballs and skiing.

✓ I did have some opportunities to take part in new activities after school because my parents signed me up for a lot of outdoor sports like football and skiing.

表达“给某人报名参加某项活动”时，应使用固定搭配“sign someone up for something”，不能说“sign someone something”。

× I did have some opportunities to take part in new activities after school because my parents signed me a lot of outdoor sports like footballs and skiing.

✓ I did have some opportunities to take part in new activities after school because my parents signed me up for a lot of outdoor sports like football and skiing.

这里的“football”表示足球这项运动，通常用单数形式；“footballs”通常指多个足球。

× So I spend a lot of time on these sports.

✓ So I spent a lot of time on these sports.

问题询问的是童年时期的经历，属于过去时间，因此应使用一般过去时“spent”，而不是现在时“spend”。

× Definitely people should try as many different things as they can for me the outdoor experience boost my bodies and make me more resilient when I face troubles, that could be benefit or a waste of life if you experience these new activities as a teenager.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many different things as they can. For me, outdoor experiences boost my body and make me more resilient when I face difficulties. Trying these new activities as a teenager could be beneficial or a waste of time.

原句包含多个独立分句，缺少必要的标点和连接结构，导致句子过长、结构不清。应将其拆分成几个完整句子，并在句首或插入语后使用逗号。

× Definitely people should try as many different things as they can for me the outdoor experience boost my bodies and make me more resilient when I face troubles, that could be benefit or a waste of life if you experience these new activities as a teenager.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many different things as they can. For me, outdoor experiences boost my body and make me more resilient when I face difficulties. Trying these new activities as a teenager could be beneficial or a waste of time.

如果主语是单数“the outdoor experience”，动词应使用“boosts”和“makes”。本次修改使用复数主语“outdoor experiences”，因此“boost”和“make”保持原形，两者在数上保持一致。

× Definitely people should try as many different things as they can for me the outdoor experience boost my bodies and make me more resilient when I face troubles, that could be benefit or a waste of life if you experience these new activities as a teenager.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many different things as they can. For me, outdoor experiences boost my body and make me more resilient when I face difficulties. Trying these new activities as a teenager could be beneficial or a waste of time.

“body”在这里指说话者自己的身体，是单数概念，因此应使用“my body”，不能使用“my bodies”。

× Definitely people should try as many different things as they can for me the outdoor experience boost my bodies and make me more resilient when I face troubles, that could be benefit or a waste of life if you experience these new activities as a teenager.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many different things as they can. For me, outdoor experiences boost my body and make me more resilient when I face difficulties. Trying these new activities as a teenager could be beneficial or a waste of time.

“benefit”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。这里改为形容词“beneficial”，表达“有益的”，避免冠词错误。如果使用名词，应说“could be a benefit”。