Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答开头有直接回应，但后半部分存在严重的词汇和语法问题，导致意思不清楚。例如，“have an opportunity”应根据过去时改为“had an opportunity”，“go upsetting down”和“have a staff to show them”不符合英语表达。建议使用清晰的结构：先回答有或没有机会，再说明具体活动，最后解释自己是否参加以及原因。同时避免重复使用“but”，并将答案控制在2至4句话内。

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my family took me hiking and camping during the holidays. However, I was quite shy, so I usually preferred watching rather than taking part in the activities.

提案: 回答表达了“人们应该尝试不同事物”的观点，但“try many questions”用词错误，应改为“try different things”或“take part in different activities”。后面的原因和句子结构不清晰，例如“too slow to solve this problems”和“If they not the people forever as a child”无法准确表达完整意思。建议按照“观点—原因—结果/例子”的结构回答，并使用连接词如“because”“as a result”和“for example”。

例: Yes, I think people should try different things whenever possible. This is because new experiences help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries a new sport may become more confident and make new friends.

× Absolutely yes, my family and I have an opportunity to go upsetting down and I have a staff to show them, but I'm very shy so I don't want to go there but

✓ Absolutely. Yes, my family and I had an opportunity to take part in a new activity, and I had someone to show me what to do, but I was very shy, so I didn't want to go there.

题目询问的是童年时期的经历，因此应使用过去时。将 have 改为 had，将 I'm 改为 I was，将 don't want 改为 didn't want。这样可以保持整段回答的时态一致。

× Absolutely yes, my family and I have an opportunity to go upsetting down and I have a staff to show them, but I'm very shy so I don't want to go there but

✓ Absolutely. Yes, my family and I had an opportunity to take part in a new activity. Someone showed me what to do, but I was very shy, so I didn't want to go there.

原句最后以 but 结尾，后面没有完整的从句，导致句子结构不完整。不要在句末单独使用 but；可以用句号结束，或者在 but 后面补充完整内容。

× I think people should try many questions because they have problems and too slow to solve this problems.

✓ I think people should try many different things because they have problems and are too slow to solve these problems.

too slow 是形容词短语，作表语时需要系动词 be。主语 they 对应 are，所以应说 they are too slow，而不能直接说 they too slow。

× I think people should try many questions because they have problems and too slow to solve this problems.

✓ I think people should try many different things because they have problems and are too slow to solve these problems.

problems 是复数名词，前面的指示词也必须使用复数形式 these，不能使用单数形式 this。应说 these problems。

× If they not the people forever as a child

✓ If they don't try different things, they will remain children forever.

原句以 If 开头，但缺少完整的谓语结构。表达否定行为时，应使用 don't try；同时，if 条件句后需要有完整的主句，因此补充了 they will remain children forever。