Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答没有完整结束，影响了表达的清晰度。建议先直接回答“有”，然后用过去时说明具体活动、年龄和参与感受。注意说“when I was eight years old”，而不是“in my eight years old”；同时避免“and I”这样的未完成结构。可以使用“when”和“because”连接细节，使答案更自然、完整。

例: Yes, I did. When I was eight years old, I took part in a school play with my classmates. I played a small role and really enjoyed performing in front of my parents because it helped me become more confident.

提案: 观点表达比较直接，但句子之间缺少标点和连接词，且“each candidate”不适合这里的语境，应改为“people”或“individuals”。“lead to each candidate to personally grow”结构错误，建议使用“help people grow personally”。可以补充一个具体例子或结果，让答案更有内容，例如尝试新爱好能够发现兴趣并增强自信。

例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. By exploring new activities, they can discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, trying a new sport or joining a club can help people become more confident and meet new friends.

× Yes, and I don't remember nearly but I think it's my in my eight years old I took part in a school play with my classmates and I

✓ Yes, I don't remember clearly, but I think that when I was eight years old, I took part in a school play with my classmates.

“Nearly”表示“几乎”，不能表达“记得不清楚”。这里应使用副词“clearly”，表示“清楚地”。建议学习常见副词的含义和搭配，例如“remember clearly”。

× Yes, and I don't remember nearly but I think it's my in my eight years old I took part in a school play with my classmates and I

✓ Yes, I don't remember clearly, but I think that when I was eight years old, I took part in a school play with my classmates.

“it's my in my eight years old”结构错误。表达年龄时，应使用“when I was + 年龄 + years old”，不能使用“it's my + 年龄”。另外，句末的“and I”没有完整的谓语，应该删除。建议使用完整的时间从句，例如“when I was eight years old”。

× Yes, and I don't remember nearly but I think it's my in my eight years old I took part in a school play with my classmates and I

✓ Yes, I don't remember clearly, but I think that when I was eight years old, I took part in a school play with my classmates.

句末的“and I”只有主语“I”，没有谓语动词，因此形成不完整的句子。应删除这个多余的片段，或者补充完整的谓语。这里删除它即可使句子完整。

× I think people should try different things in their life It can lead to each candidate to personally grow and progress

✓ I think people should try different things in their lives. They can lead each person to grow and progress personally.

“people”是复数主语，因此对应的所有格名词也应使用复数形式“lives”，而不是“life”。建议注意主语和相关名词的单复数一致。

× I think people should try different things in their life It can lead to each candidate to personally grow and progress

✓ I think people should try different things in their lives. They can lead each person to grow and progress personally.

“lead”表示“使某人做某事”时，常用结构是“lead + someone + to do something”，不能说“lead to someone to do something”。“lead to”后面通常接名词或动名词，例如“lead to personal growth”。

× I think people should try different things in their life It can lead to each candidate to personally grow and progress

✓ I think people should try different things in their lives. They can lead each person to grow and progress personally.

原句把两个完整句子直接连接在一起，句子边界不清楚；同时“lead to each candidate to grow”结构不正确。应使用句号分开两个句子，并改为“lead each person to grow”。建议每个完整句子都包含清晰的主语和谓语，并正确使用连接方式。