Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense because the question asks about your childhood. Avoid repeating “I participated” and use a more natural expression such as “I had plenty of opportunities.” You could also add one specific detail about which activity you enjoyed most or what you learned from it.

例: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I took dancing, painting, and singing classes after school. I particularly enjoyed dancing because it helped me become more confident and make new friends.

提案: State your opinion clearly and use the natural expression “try as many different things as possible.” Avoid awkward phrases such as “the people have ability” and “participate in other activities from their work.” Support your opinion with one or two specific benefits, such as developing new skills, discovering interests, or becoming more adaptable.

例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. This allows them to discover their interests and develop a wider range of skills. For instance, someone who tries cooking, sports, and volunteering may become more confident and adaptable in both their personal and professional life.

× Yes, I have a lot of opportunities to take part in extracurricular activities.

✓ Yes, I had a lot of opportunities to take part in extracurricular activities.

The question asks about opportunities during childhood, which is a finished time in the past. Therefore, use the past tense had instead of the present perfect form have.

× Yes, according to me, people should try different things as they can because the people have ability to do multiple tasks at their home, at their workplace, they can participate in other activities from their work.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, people should try as many different things as they can because they have the ability to do multiple tasks at home and at their workplace.

The structure as many different things as they can is needed to express the meaning of trying the maximum number of activities. The quantifier many must be included before the plural noun things.

× Yes, according to me, people should try different things as they can because the people have ability to do multiple tasks at their home, at their workplace, they can participate in other activities from their work.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, people should try as many different things as they can because people have the ability to do multiple tasks at home and at their workplace.

People is being used in a general sense, so it should not be preceded by the definite article the. Use the people only when referring to a specific group of people.

× Yes, according to me, people should try different things as they can because the people have ability to do multiple tasks at their home, at their workplace, they can participate in other activities from their work.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, people should try as many different things as they can because people have the ability to do multiple tasks at home and at their workplace.

Ability is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs a determiner. The definite article the is appropriate because the sentence refers to the ability to perform multiple tasks.

× Yes, according to me, people should try different things as they can because the people have ability to do multiple tasks at their home, at their workplace, they can participate in other activities from their work.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, people should try as many different things as they can because people have the ability to do multiple tasks at home and at their workplace. They can also participate in other activities outside of work.

The standard expression is at home, not at their home, when talking about a person’s usual residence. The phrase outside of work is more accurate than from their work because it means activities that are separate from working.

× Yes, according to me, people should try different things as they can because the people have ability to do multiple tasks at their home, at their workplace, they can participate in other activities from their work.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, people should try as many different things as they can because people have the ability to do multiple tasks at home and at their workplace. They can also participate in other activities outside of work.

The original sentence joins several independent ideas with commas, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two complete sentences and use a conjunction such as and to connect closely related information.