Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 「Yes」で直接答えられていますが、文の後半に文法・語彙の誤りが多く、内容が不明瞭です。「practice」は過去形の「practiced」にし、「pray」ではなく「play」を使いましょう。また、「to and for the concert」の部分は、「to prepare for concerts」のように表現できます。経験、努力、結果の順に述べ、具体的な情報を1つ加えると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

例: Yes, I had the opportunity to learn to play the piano when I was young. I practiced regularly to prepare for school concerts. Although it was difficult at first, I became more confident and really enjoyed performing.

提案: 意見は示せていますが、「because」の後を独立した文にせず、理由を完全な文として続ける必要があります。「the people」は一般論では通常「people」とし、「spread their past perspectives」は不自然なので、「broaden their perspectives」と言いましょう。新しい経験が視野を広げるという理由に加え、具体例や結果を1つ述べると、回答がより明確で説得力のあるものになります。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because new experiences can broaden their perspectives. For example, learning a musical instrument or joining a sports team can help people discover new interests and meet different kinds of people. As a result, they may become more confident and adaptable.

× Yes, I had a chance to play the piano when I was young and I practice a lot to pray the piano and to and for the concert

✓ Yes, I had a chance to play the piano when I was young, and I practiced a lot to play the piano for concerts.

The question refers to childhood, so the past-tense form practiced is required instead of practice. Also, play is the correct verb for a musical instrument, and for concerts is the appropriate prepositional phrase.

× Yes, I had a chance to play the piano when I was young and I practice a lot to pray the piano and to and for the concert

✓ Yes, I had a chance to play the piano when I was young, and I practiced a lot to play the piano for concerts.

The original phrase to and for the concert is incomplete and uses prepositions incorrectly. Use for concerts to express the purpose of practicing or performing. Also, concerts is plural when speaking about concerts in general.

× I think people should because if the people try as many different things as they can. They can spread their past perspectives.

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can because doing so can broaden their perspectives.

The clause I think people should is incomplete because should must be followed by a base-form verb. The clause beginning with because if is also incomplete and incorrectly separated by a full stop. Combine the ideas into one complete sentence with should try and because.

× I think people should because if the people try as many different things as they can. They can spread their past perspectives.

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can because doing so can broaden their perspectives.

When referring to people in general, do not use the definite article the before people. Use people without an article. The phrase broaden their perspectives is also the natural expression for developing wider viewpoints.