Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점과 기회를 갖지 못한 이유를 설명한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 “much many chances”는 “many chances” 또는 “many opportunities”로 고쳐야 하며, “I couldn't have”보다 “I didn't have”가 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 “I had to go to school”은 일반적인 사실이므로 “I went to school”이 더 적절하고, 학원에서 수학을 배웠다는 내용 외에 구체적인 예시나 아쉬움을 한 문장 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다. 문장을 두세 개로 나누어 명확하게 말하는 것도 좋습니다.

例: Unfortunately, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities when I was young. I went to school and attended math academies almost every day, so I didn’t have much free time. Looking back, I wish I had tried a sport or learned to play a musical instrument.

提案: “Yes”로 명확하게 의견을 제시하고 이유를 덧붙인 점은 좋습니다. 그러나 “challenge things”보다는 “try different things” 또는 “challenge themselves in different ways”가 자연스럽고, “make people can more be more stronger”는 “make people stronger” 또는 “help people become more confident”로 수정해야 합니다. “as many different things as they can”의 반복을 피하고, 다양한 경험이 어떻게 도움이 되는지 구체적인 결과나 예시를 추가하세요. 예를 들어 새로운 활동이 자신감이나 적성 발견에 도움이 된다고 설명하면 논리적이고 효과적인 답변이 됩니다.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of things whenever possible. Different experiences can help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, trying a new sport or joining a club can make people more confident and help them meet new friends.

× Unfortunately I couldn't have much many chances to take part in new activities when I was young because I had to go to school and then I went to academies where I learned math.

✓ Unfortunately, I couldn't have many chances to take part in new activities when I was young because I had to go to school, and then I went to academies where I learned math.

“Chances” is a plural countable noun, so it should be modified by “many,” not “much.” Use “much” with uncountable nouns, such as “much time” or “much money.”

× Yes, I think people have to challenge as many different things as they can because they can learn so many things from various experiences and then those things make people can more be more stronger.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn so much from various experiences, and those experiences can make people stronger.

The verb “make” should not be followed directly by the modal verb “can” in this structure. Use “can make people stronger,” not “make people can be stronger.” Also, “should” expresses advice more naturally than “have to” in this context.

× Yes, I think people have to challenge as many different things as they can because they can learn so many things from various experiences and then those things make people can more be more stronger.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn so much from various experiences, and those experiences can make people stronger.

“More stronger” is incorrect because “stronger” already contains the comparative ending “-er.” Use either “stronger” or “more strong,” but not both. In this sentence, “stronger” is the correct form.

× Yes, I think people have to challenge as many different things as they can because they can learn so many things from various experiences and then those things make people can more be more stronger.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can learn so much from various experiences, and those experiences can make people stronger.

The original sentence contains an incorrect verb structure: “make people can more be more stronger.” After “make + object,” use the base form or an adjective complement. Here, “make people stronger” is the correct structure. Avoid repeating unnecessary words such as “more” and “be.”