Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly using the past tense because you are describing your childhood. Avoid repeating words and correct the unclear phrase “when I watch her.” Use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example and a reason or result. For example, say “I had several opportunities to try new activities, such as joining the soccer team.”

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I joined the soccer team when I was about ten. I enjoyed it because I made new friends and became more confident.

提案: State your opinion clearly at the beginning and use grammatically correct structures, such as “People should try different activities because...” Avoid repetition and finish your example. Develop the answer with one or two specific benefits, using a linking word such as “because,” “for example,” or “as a result.”

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone might try cooking, photography, or a new sport. Even if they do not continue, they can learn something valuable from the experience.

× Yes, I did many.

✓ Yes, I did.

The answer should use the complete short response Yes, I did because the question begins with Did you...? The word many cannot be used alone here because it needs a noun, such as opportunities.

× I have many opportunity.

✓ I had many opportunities.

Many must be followed by a plural countable noun, so opportunity becomes opportunities. Also, the past-tense form had is needed because the question asks about childhood experiences.

× I have many opportunities to take a new activity.

✓ I had many opportunities to take part in new activities.

Use the past tense had because the question refers to the student's childhood. The phrase take part in activities is more natural than take a new activity, and activities is plural after many.

× When I watch her, I join the soccer team.

✓ For example, I joined the soccer team when I was a child.

The past-tense forms joined and was are required because joining the soccer team happened in the past. Use when I was a child to express the intended childhood time reference clearly.

× People should do many different things as they can.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can.

The correct quantity structure is as many + plural countable noun + as. Therefore, say as many different things as they can. Try also matches the wording of the examiner's question more naturally than do.

× You can challenge yourself and improving in different activities.

✓ You can challenge yourself and improve in different activities.

After the modal verb can, use the base form of the verb. Therefore, improving must change to improve. The two verbs should also be parallel: can challenge and improve.

× You can challenge yourself and improving in different activities.

✓ You can challenge yourself and improve in different activities.

The verbs joined by and should have the same grammatical form. Challenge is a base verb, so improving should also be changed to the base verb improve.

× For example, like

✓ For example, you can try joining a sports team or learning a new skill.

For example, like is only a fragment and does not contain a complete clause. Add a subject and a verb to make a complete example, such as you can try.