Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the past tense. Use “Yes, I did” instead of “Yes, I do,” and say “an activity I used to do” rather than “activity that I always do.” Add one specific detail about how or why you played the guitar. Avoid the unclear phrase “I have open today.”

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had the opportunity to learn to play the guitar. I practiced at home several times a week, and I really enjoyed learning new songs.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two relevant reasons and examples. Use natural expressions such as “try different activities” and “if they are interested in something.” Avoid repetition, unclear phrases like “when you watch a childhood,” and the unfinished ending about your husband. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone might try soccer, cooking, or a musical instrument before deciding what they enjoy most. However, they do not need to continue activities that they genuinely dislike.

× Yes, I do I have open today and activity that I always do when I was a child is playing guitar.

✓ Yes, I did. An activity that I always did when I was a child was playing the guitar.

The question asks about opportunities in the past, so use the past tense: did, did, and was. The original response also contains a run-on structure, so it should be divided into two clear parts. Use an before activity because it is a singular countable noun, and use the guitar because this instrument normally takes the definite article.

× Yes, I do I have open today and activity that I always do when I was a child is playing guitar.

✓ Yes, I did. An activity that I always did when I was a child was playing the guitar.

Activity is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article an. Guitar normally takes the definite article the when referring to the musical instrument: play the guitar.

× Yes, I do I have open today and activity that I always do when I was a child is playing guitar.

✓ Yes, I did. An activity that I always did when I was a child was playing the guitar.

The original sentence combines several incomplete and incorrectly connected parts. Separate the answer from the description of the activity, and use a clear subject, verb, and complement in each sentence.

× Yes people could do many different things as they want like when you watch a childhood even now on you want to play soccer, you should come and play soccer.

✓ Yes, people should try many different things. For example, if you want to play soccer, you should go and play soccer.

The question asks whether people should try different things, so should is more appropriate than could. Use should for advice or recommendation. The phrase as they want does not express the meaning of the question clearly; use as they can or state the recommendation directly.

× Yes people could do many different things as they want like when you watch a childhood even now on you want to play soccer, you should come and play soccer.

✓ Yes, people should try many different things. For example, if you want to play soccer, you should go and play soccer.

The original sentence contains several unclear and incorrectly connected clauses, including like when you watch a childhood even now on. Use a separate example introduced by for example, followed by a complete if-clause and a main clause.

× Yes people could do many different things as they want like when you watch a childhood even now on you want to play soccer, you should come and play soccer.

✓ Yes, people should try many different things. For example, if you want to play soccer, you should go and play soccer.

Like when does not connect the example correctly in this sentence. Use for example to introduce an illustration and if to introduce the condition: For example, if you want to play soccer, you should go and play soccer.

× For me, my husband

✓ For me, my husband also encourages me to try different activities.

The original phrase is incomplete because it has no main verb and does not express a complete idea. Add a verb and finish the thought. Because the transcript ends here, this correction provides one possible complete sentence.