Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，内容清晰，并且提供了三个具体原因和结果，结构比较完整。需要注意语法和搭配：应说“new activities”而不是“new activity”，“I was a shy child”比“I’m a shy kid”更符合过去时，“my parents were busy with work”比“busy on their work”自然。此外，可以使用“Although...,...”或“As a result”增强逻辑，并避免把多个原因全部堆在一个很长的句子中。

例: Not really. I didn’t have many chances to try new activities as a child because I was quite shy and my school offered very few extracurricular activities. In addition, my parents were usually busy with work, so I mostly stayed at home, did my homework, and watched TV.

提案: 回答有明确观点，但内容过于简短，第二句存在连接词和冠词问题。“where”应改为“while”，“focus on same thing”应改为“focus on the same thing”。建议先说明自己的总体看法，再分别解释两类人的情况，最后加入一个具体例子或结果，这样能更充分地回答问题并提高内容分数。

例: I think people should try a few different things, but they don’t necessarily need to try everything. Exploring new activities can help people discover their interests and develop useful skills. However, some people prefer to focus on one area so that they can become highly skilled at it. For example, a student might try several sports before deciding to concentrate on swimming.

× No, I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activity as a child because I'm a shy kid, my school didn't offer a lot of extracurricular options and my parents were busy on their work. So I just stayed at home, did my homework, and watched TV.

✓ No, I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because I'm a shy kid, my school didn't offer a lot of extracurricular options, and my parents were busy with their work. So I just stayed at home, did my homework, and watched TV.

“activity”前面有“many opportunities”以及“new”所表达的多种活动，因此应使用复数形式“activities”。建议注意数量词或表示“许多”的词后面通常接可数名词复数。

× No, I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activity as a child because I'm a shy kid, my school didn't offer a lot of extracurricular options and my parents were busy on their work. So I just stayed at home, did my homework, and watched TV.

✓ No, I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activity as a child because I'm a shy kid, my school didn't offer a lot of extracurricular options, and my parents were busy with their work. So I just stayed at home, did my homework, and watched TV.

表示“忙于某事”时，固定搭配是“be busy with something”，不能说“be busy on their work”。也可以说“my parents were busy working”。建议积累常见的形容词与介词搭配。

× Some people prefer exploring many different activities where others prefer to focus on same thing. It depends on what you like.

✓ Some people prefer exploring many different activities, while others prefer to focus on the same thing. It depends on what you like.

这里是在对比两类人的偏好，应使用表示“而、然而”的连词“while”。“where”通常表示地点或情况，不适合用来连接这种对比关系。建议比较两种不同情况时使用“while”或“whereas”。

× Some people prefer exploring many different activities where others prefer to focus on same thing. It depends on what you like.

✓ Some people prefer exploring many different activities where others prefer to focus on the same thing. It depends on what you like.

“same”前面通常需要定冠词“the”，固定表达是“the same thing”，表示“同一件事”。建议记住“the same + 名词”这一固定搭配。