Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接表达了“没有”，但语法和表达问题较多。应说“take part in new activities”，不能说“take a part”；“it caused by”应改为“it was because”；“they're orphan”应改为“they were orphans”，并且需要使用完整、清晰的句子。建议采用“直接回答 + 原因 + 具体例子”的结构，并用“because”或“so”连接信息。

例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents were orphans and had to work very hard, so they were often too busy to take me to clubs or classes. As a result, I mostly stayed at home and played with simple toys.

提案: 回答表达了赞同，但“for their self”应改为“for themselves”，“new managers”用词错误，可能想表达“new experiences”或“new skills”；“new brains”也不自然。应先明确观点，再说明尝试新事物可以带来新体验、发现兴趣或培养技能，并使用“because”“for example”等连接词。避免重复“for the self”，并确保答案不超过4句。

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries cooking, painting, or learning a language may find a talent they did not know they had. It can also make life more interesting and build confidence.

× No, I didn't have any opportunities to take a part in the new activities in my childhood because I think it caused by my parents they're orphan they were orphans too busy so I didn't have the chance

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities during my childhood because I think it was because my parents were too busy, so I didn't have a chance.

“take part”是固定搭配，不能说“take a part”。这里的“new activities”是泛指，不需要使用定冠词“the”。另外，“chance”是可数名词单数，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”。

× No, I didn't have any opportunities to take a part in the new activities in my childhood because I think it caused by my parents they're orphan they were orphans too busy so I didn't have the chance

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities during my childhood because I think it was because my parents were too busy, so I didn't have a chance.

“it caused by my parents”缺少被动语态中的助动词“was”。如果表达“这是因为父母太忙”，可以说“It was because my parents were too busy”。“caused by”通常表示“由……造成”，但在这里使用“It was because...”更自然。

× No, I didn't have any opportunities to take a part in the new activities in my childhood because I think it caused by my parents they're orphan they were orphans too busy so I didn't have the chance

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities during my childhood because I think it was because my parents were too busy, so I didn't have a chance.

原句把多个分句连续连接在一起，缺少必要的标点和连接结构，造成句子过长、意思不清。可以使用“because”和“so”清楚地表达原因和结果，并删除无关或重复的内容。回答口语题时，建议使用“主句 + because原因 + so结果”的结构。

× Yeah, I think everyone should try new things for their self, for the self because I think it will take new things and new managers, new brains for us.

✓ Yeah, I think everyone should try new things for themselves because I think this will bring us new experiences and ideas.

“their self”和“the self”都不是正确的表达。表示“他们自己”时，应使用反身代词“themselves”。“everyone”虽然是单数，但现代英语中可以使用单数“they/their/themselves”。同时，“for themselves”在这里表达“为了他们自己”，只需要使用一次即可。

× Yeah, I think everyone should try new things for their self, for the self because I think it will take new things and new managers, new brains for us.

✓ Yeah, I think everyone should try new things for themselves because I think this will bring us new experiences and ideas.

原句重复使用“for...”并把几个意思不完整的短语连接在一起，导致句子结构混乱。“because”后面需要接完整的句子，例如“this will bring us...”。建议使用清晰的结构：“I think everyone should... because it will...”。