Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接回应了问题，也提到了父母的鼓励，但答案没有完整结束，且重复了“I have I have”。“as a child”描述过去经历，应使用一般过去时，例如“had”和“encouraged”。“fresh activities”不太自然，建议改为“new activities”或“a variety of activities”。你还可以补充一个具体活动、参加原因或收获，并使用“for example”连接细节。

例: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents encouraged me to take part in activities such as swimming and drawing. For example, I joined a swimming class when I was seven, and it helped me become more confident.

提案: 你的观点明确，但句子过长，存在重复和不自然的表达，例如“the life is so long”“the capable capable activities”。建议使用更自然的句式：“life is full of possibilities”以及“what they are capable of”。避免同时使用“since”和“so”造成结构重复。可以先给出观点，再用一个具体结果或例子支持，例如尝试不同活动能帮助人们发现兴趣或技能。

例: Definitely. People should try different things because life is full of possibilities, and they may discover talents they never knew they had. For instance, someone who tries photography might find a new passion and even turn it into a career.

× Yes, I have I have plenty of opportunities to participate in fresh activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to participate in new activities as a child.

“As a child”表示过去的时间，因此应使用一般过去时“had”，而不能使用现在完成时“have”。另外，口语中的重复“I have I have”应删除。

× Definitely since the life is so long and you cannot know what the capable capable activities you can do, so you should try as many as you can.

✓ Definitely, since life is so long, you cannot know what activities you are capable of, so you should try as many as you can.

“life”在这里是泛指生活，不需要使用定冠词“the”。因此应说“life”，而不是“the life”。

× what the capable capable activities you can do

✓ what activities you are capable of

“capable”通常用来描述人或有能力的主体，不能直接修饰“activities”。表达“能够做什么活动”时，应使用“what activities you are capable of”。同时，“capable”重复了一次，应删除。

× what the capable capable activities you can do

✓ what activities you are capable of

固定搭配是“be capable of doing something”，所以“capable”后面需要介词“of”。这里应说“activities you are capable of”，而不是直接说“capable activities”。

× Definitely since the life is so long and you cannot know what the capable capable activities you can do, so you should try as many as you can.

✓ Definitely, since life is so long, you cannot know what activities you are capable of, so you should try as many as you can.

“since”引导原因从句时，不能与“so”重复构成同一个因果结构。可以保留“since”并使用逗号分隔主句，也可以删除“since”；这里的修改避免了连接词重复使用。