Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答题需要更清晰的时态和句子结构，并提供具体细节；避免重复和含糊的表达。可以先用一句主题句直接回答（例如：Yes, I did.），然后用一到两句补充细节，说明什么时候学、在哪里学、学了多久以及你的感受或原因。注意使用正确的时态（过去式）和连接词（for example, but, because）。

例: Yes, I did. I took piano lessons when I was a child at a local music school near my home. I studied for about two years because my mother was keen on music, although I didn’t enjoy it much myself.

提案: 答案要更有条理，给出直接立场后用1-2个具体理由支持，并用连接词使表达连贯。减少填充词（uh, umm），使用更准确的词汇（e.g. explore, experience）。可以给出一两个具体例子说明为什么尝试不同事物有益。

例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. Trying new activities helps you discover your interests and develop new skills, for example learning a language can improve your career prospects, and trying sports can boost your health.

× Yes, I took a piano lesson while I am child umm when I am learned piano and it has a music school near my home and I will to protect the piano in the India but I don't like the music uh but my mom interest it.

✓ Yes. I took piano lessons when I was a child. There was a music school near my home, and I went to learn piano in India, but I didn't like the music. However, my mom was interested in it.

问题类型（6：现在时态问题）与（5：过去时态问题）混合：学生在一句话中错误地将过去时间情况用现在时（'I am child'、'when I am learned'）以及将过去动作与将来/其他时态混用（'I will to protect the piano in the India'）。正确表达应该把童年和过去发生的动作都用过去时：'when I was a child'、'when I learned/when I was learning'，此外需要调整句子结构并补全介词/冠词：'piano lessons'（复数更常见）、'a music school'、'in India'。最后用过去时描述不喜欢：'I didn't like the music'，并用被动或形容词短语表达母亲的兴趣：'my mom was interested in it'。建议：把表示过去的时间状语统一使用过去时，注意主谓一致和正确的介词与冠词使用。

× Actually, I'm, I think yes, uh, life has long time and I think, uh, in this, in this world, uh, it has many interesting things like, uh, learn some more, learn some more knowledge or music. Umm, yes.

✓ Actually, I think yes. Life is long, and I think the world has many interesting things, such as learning more knowledge or music.

问题类型（6：现在时态问题/句子结构问题）：原句语序混乱并且时态与表达不自然（'life has long time' 应为 'life is long' 或 'life is a long time'但更自然为 'Life is long'）。'it has many interesting things' 中的主语指代不明确，改为 'the world has many interesting things'。'learn some more, learn some more knowledge or music' 是动词形式重复且不完整，应改为名词短语或动名词：'learning more' 或 'learning more knowledge or learning music'，但更自然为 'such as learning more or studying music'。建议：简化句子，使用正确的主语和谓语，使用动名词短语表示一般性的活动。