Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Mention particular activities, where or with whom you did them, and how they affected you. Keep it natural and within 3–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I had opportunities to try a few new activities, such as swimming lessons at the local pool and painting classes at school. For example, swimming helped me become more confident in water, and painting encouraged my creativity and patience.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with reasons and an example using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Be specific about benefits and avoid vague phrasing. Use 2–3 sentences total.

例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover interests and develop new skills. For example, trying sports can improve fitness and teamwork, while learning an instrument can boost discipline and creativity.

× People try many different things and they do like it.

✓ People should try many different things and they will like them.

The original sentence has a subject-verb and pronoun reference issue. 'People try' is present simple but the examiner asked about general advice, so 'should try' better matches modal advice (Grammar Problem Type 4) and intention; however the most direct grammatical error is incorrect pronoun and auxiliary use: 'they do like it' is awkward and incorrectly references 'it' for plural 'many different things'. Use 'will like them' to match number and express likely result. Suggestion: use 'People should try many different things and they will like them.' This corrects subject-verb/modal usage and fixes the singular pronoun to a plural pronoun that agrees with 'many different things'.