Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence saying whether you had opportunities, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (remember → remember, would have availed → would have taken advantage). Keep it under five sentences. For example, mention a particular activity or explain why you don’t recall and how you would react now.

例: I don’t really remember having many opportunities to try new activities as a child. However, if I had the chance, I would have taken part because I am interested in practical activities like sports and science clubs. For example, I would have joined a school football team to improve my fitness and teamwork skills.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting reasons linked with connectors (for example, because, furthermore, for instance). Correct grammar (make → makes; ability to like recreate new things → ability to be creative or to generate new ideas). Use concrete examples to strengthen your answer and stay within five sentences.

例: Yes, people should try many different activities because it helps them become more confident and improves social skills. For example, trying a public-speaking club can reduce nervousness, and joining a cooking class can teach practical skills and spark creativity. Therefore, exploring new things broadens your experience and opens up new opportunities.

× Honestly I didn't remember any opportunity at the moment but definitely if I had any opportunity I will avail of course, I am a very like I have very interested to do this type of activities like speed.

✓ Honestly I don't remember any opportunities from my childhood, but if I had had any I would have taken them. I am very interested in doing activities like that.

Multiple tense errors: the student uses 'didn't remember' with 'at the moment' which conflicts in time and context. Use present simple 'don't remember' for current memory. The conditional 'if I had any opportunity I will avail' mixes past hypothetical with future 'will'; for a past hypothetical about childhood use past perfect in the if-clause ('had had') and conditional perfect ('would have taken') or simple conditional depending on meaning. 'avail' is incorrect/informal here; use 'take' or 'make use of'. Also pluralization: 'any opportunity' should be 'any opportunities' to match general reference. 'I am a very like I have very interested' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I am very interested in'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, use correct conditional forms (if + past perfect -> would have + past participle) and proper verb phrases and prepositions ('interested in').

× I am a very like I have very interested to do this type of activities like speed.

✓ I am very interested in doing activities like that.

Incorrect preposition and structure: 'interested to do' is less natural than 'interested in doing' when followed by a noun/gerund. 'This type of activities' needs plural agreement and 'this type of' is better as 'activities like that' or 'this type of activity' (singular). Also remove extraneous words ('a very like I have very'). Suggestion: use 'interested in' + gerund or 'interested in' + noun phrase, and ensure number agreement ('activities' vs 'activity').

× Yes, people should definitely try as many different things as they can because doing this thing make them more confident and more social and ability to like recreate new things.

✓ Yes, people should definitely try as many different things as they can because doing these things makes them more confident, more social, and better able to create new things.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'doing this thing make' should be 'doing these things makes' because plural subject requires singular verb 'makes'. 'More social and ability to like recreate new things' is ungrammatical: use 'more social' and 'better able to create new things'. 'Like' is unnecessary. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number, use parallel structure in lists, and replace awkward phrases with 'better able to' + base verb.